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You're mean..... but I like where this is going!!!!! more please!!!!!! Poor Inu you made kouga make him cry but I know Inu will get even some where heee heee

Poor Inuyasha. T.T

Well it has promise for sure... it needs a beta though because its a little hard to read with everything all smushed together. Kouga and Inuyasha is my fave pairing ever and I take it very seriously hehehe -- hit me up if you'd like a beta or whatnot-- I like the tone of this story.

more i want more no no no no make that I NEED MORE!!!

It's always nice to see a new Kouga/Inu fic posted. However, this first, very short chapter is quite confusing. This is not a flame, only a bit of advise. It is very, very important when writing that you separate dialogue. Each time a character speaks you must start a new line. Otherwise, it becomes confusing as to who is saying what. Even if you follow the dialogue with "Kouga said", the coversation become blurred.

I think you'll find that doing this will also help your writing and assist you in keeping you thoughts in order. You seem to be kinda all over the place, making it difficult for the reader to try and figure out where you're going with the story.

I hope you'll take these suggestions AS suggestions to help you out. Good luck with this story, I'll look forward to reading more. ^_^

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