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May 11, 2020 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon ðŸ™
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May 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What a great story please update soon. It's so sweet that it calms my soul. Good luck
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May 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
awwwwww i love this story so far its soooooo cuute i really hope you update it soon cause its good ^.^
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wat can u say awesome i can that was awesome u must write more pwease
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This reads like a 8 year-old wrote it. As an outline.
Seriously, you're 19 and you didn't bother to correct anything? There is no real detail, if Kagome were any more sweet, she'd give you cavities just by looking at her. And Sess wanting Kagome after she's been caring for him like a mother, there is no way in Heaven that he'd do that. He'd be having major identity issues for one thing. His earlier memories would be telling him he's a big bad demon lord, while his most recent would be saying Kagome is his mother. And you don't start lactating just because a baby is around. If that was true, we'd all be wearing nursing bras 24/7. Inuyasha really doesn't want to kill Sess. He just wants to be left alone and keep his sword. He doesn't like him, but he's not a kill on sight hate.
This needs major revision and a real plot. You should have enough education under your belt to be brave enough to revamp this into a better story.
Seriously, you're 19 and you didn't bother to correct anything? There is no real detail, if Kagome were any more sweet, she'd give you cavities just by looking at her. And Sess wanting Kagome after she's been caring for him like a mother, there is no way in Heaven that he'd do that. He'd be having major identity issues for one thing. His earlier memories would be telling him he's a big bad demon lord, while his most recent would be saying Kagome is his mother. And you don't start lactating just because a baby is around. If that was true, we'd all be wearing nursing bras 24/7. Inuyasha really doesn't want to kill Sess. He just wants to be left alone and keep his sword. He doesn't like him, but he's not a kill on sight hate.
This needs major revision and a real plot. You should have enough education under your belt to be brave enough to revamp this into a better story.
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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Where are the other chapters? Nice story though!
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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I COMPLETELY LOVE IT. PLEASE, PLEASE, UPDATE SOON, PLEASE!!!!!!
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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
all im going to say is. you've been cheated otta reviews, his story is starting to pull itsself together, and I love it. keep up the good work and I hope to see more of your stuff.
Dawna Sama
PS: my e-mail has changed, if you want to write back then im me at AquaSpirit23.
Dawna Sama
PS: my e-mail has changed, if you want to write back then im me at AquaSpirit23.