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for Come Undone

by obsidiantresses

schedule May 1, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This was incredible. So amazing. I loved your thesaurian vocabulary. But truthfully the story was delicate and moving. I had hoped it would end the way it did but I will be honest that I hadn't truly expected it. Very nicely done.
person pammy
schedule April 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I agree with the previous reviewer -- it's a wonder you haven't received more reviews for this story. Very nicely done, very hot. You certainly had my attention.

I look forward to your future efforts.
schedule April 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
that was absolutely amazing from the beginning to the very end. It was captivating and alluring. You truly have a gift and I can't wait to read more of your work. This was probably the best sesshomaru/kagome fix I have read. You had me going with her being a high priced prostitute but on the end it was...well we all read the story. Again it was truly amazing thank you for giving us a great lemon and an adoring love story!
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOOOOOOOOOW!!!I could have never guessed any of that! His fantasy was to be her first and last.And that from the BEGINING they were pretending that he was a lonely man and that she was an escourt all because it was his birthday.Even in they MINDS it seemed it looked like all off that pretending was so real.Great job at making me gasp and be surprised out my mind!!!Lol. Loved it!!
Love Always^
^Dei Dei
person sugar0o
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
that was amazing! fantastic job!
schedule March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I loved it. I don't know why you have so little reviews. After that acting she did I hoped he gave her that money because as I see it she earned every penny ^_^
person sugar0o
schedule March 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
review: OMG this has got to be one of the hottest fics i've read, i give you kudos because a lot of people just write a lemon and their done, your taking into acct full emotional consequences. its fabulous.

idea of his fantasy: to be loved. honestly loved.
person sugar0o
schedule March 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
lmao great last liner ^_^
schedule March 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That is WTF?!?! Well, this is a different twist on this couple, and I am looking forward to the next chapter. Till then, take care.
schedule March 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think that his fantasy is something like he is the teacher and she is the virgin student who he desires. So is not every guys fantasy to at least take one girls virginity, Kagome could act like he is taking hers. That's what I think. I love your story please update soon.!! XD