"That was fantastic," she said breathlessly. Having just finished this story, I find myself still revealing in the immense depth and consideration so delicately woven into every detail. Not only were you able to execute an original plot, but the incredible play between yearning, heartbreak, triumph, and the true dedication of love was potent and moving. My favorite part? The few lines describing Sesshomaru baring his neck in devotion. Lord. That may have been the true climax of the entire piece. I'm positive my heart skipped a beat at how the 'simple' act synced the entirety of the plot together. Just beautiful. Fantastic writing, you should be very proud!
Wow!! I'm truly floored by such an amazing and we'll thought out story. Incidentally, I loved the part where Kagome is kicking butt while quoting "The Wizard of Oz". I'm certain that would be a real brain teaser for those witnessing. The riddles she spouts are really confusing- which is great because I LOVE puzzles!
Just wanted to let you know this story is definitely a favorite and darkness us always great. Without darkness, we never truly appreciate at light. Continue your story in your way- there will always be someone that complains, but you just tune them out.
The spelling errors are always fun, I have them too. It's always fun to reread a story you finished and then face palm when you find a very obvious mistake, but that's what betas are for.
Anyways, as I was saying, magnificent story! I hope to see more of your tales as you really do weave an amazing story.
I think your depiction of Kagome was incredibly well done. She is very much a martyr... and this seems like something she would do. I enjoyed that it was not all unicorns and rainbows and sunshine. I truly think the loss and tragedy are the roots of every good story. As horrid as that may sound...
I liked all of your original characters, as well as your knowledge of history, religion, etc...
I spotted a few missing commas here and there, but really that's about it. That's pretty damn good!!
I'm going to check out your other works now.
CR~