rate_review Reviews

I think this was an interesting start, but some of the scene jumps were a little confusing at first. I think the overall descriptions of places and emotions could be further realized. In all actuality, you could have waited until the second chapter to reveal Sesshomaru's interest.

I still think that this is, overall, quite good, and an interesting idea. I just feel like the emotional buld up could be more pronounced. Everything feels so brief.

But it's good! Don't stop writing it, by any means. I will be interested to see a story where Sesshomaru and Rin must present a united front towards outside influences instead of fighting their feelings for one another. That's quite a change of pace.

Lol you're funny. You make me smile. I loved your authors note with the whole onions have layers thing from Shrek. I think you're doing a great job with Sess and I love how you've incorporated events from the manga into your story. It really makes it more realistic. So keep writing cause I think you're doing an amazing job. Can't wait to read the next chapter! ^_^

this is something alright. i like the start.

You had a nice start so far, I can't wait to read more. Update soon!!!

Good start! Can't wait to see how it unfolds :-) Also, poor Inuyasha it made me sad that he's without his mate...hopefully Sess won't let his pride get in his way of being with Rin.