rate_review Reviews

First of all, I would like to say Wow! The fact that this is your first fic is truly amazing. There are authors out there who have written very many fics and are no where near as talented as you are. Seriously, this story is very good. The grammar and spelling were pretty decent. I only noticed a few mistakes here and there. But, nothing to stop the flow of the story. The chapters are lengthy and very descriptive.You have a very humorous writing style that I enjoy very much. I truly enjoyed: “I’m sorry Higurashi-san,” the police officer would say, “but your daughter’s death seems to have been caused by too much blood rushing to her head. I’m afraid that your daughter blushed herself to death.” And then her mother would drop to her knees crying in a sudden downpour of rain and scream, “Why, Kami? Why? In the name of all that is holy, why did you have to take her away?”


I really like that you're taking things rather slowly with these two. They have worked together for 2+ years and have built up that sexual chemistry which seems to flow out of both of them. It's going to be interesting to see where Rin came from and how she is going to impact the relationship between Kagome and Sess. I'm also curious to see if Inuyasha plays a role in this story, or for that matter any other major characters such as Sango or Miroku. On a side note, though I am a big Sess/Kag fan, I was kind of disappionted to see Kouga just give up on her after their fight. If they had indeed been together for so long, and he did love her, why did he just let her walk out of his life?Something just doesn't sit well for me on that subject.

Anyway, once again you are an amazing writer. Your lemons, though we've only scene a tiny lemony scene so far, are looking promising as well. I'm really looking forward to more chapters!

One more thing I would like to add. I noticed that you mentioned you were getting low ratings on your fic on A-Single-Spark. That really surprises me. As I've mentioned above your writing is beautiful. What gets me is that usually people leave high ratings and great reviews for stories that are just awful. Stories with no plot, overused plot, huge punctuation mistakes and horrible characterization seem to get a crap load of high ratings on that site. But, please pay them no mind. Your story is only 6 chapters in on this site and has recieved 38 reviews. That in itself should tell you something, especially since people very rarely leave reviews on this site unless it's amazing.

Like you mentioned before, if they felt there was something that needed to be improved on your fic they should have left a review and mentioned it to you. Obviously, you have taken the time to write this fic so at least people could offer you their opinion to help you improve as a writer. Honestly, the only thing with your fic I see that is even remotely worth fixing is the few grammar/spelling errors. But, really it isn't that big of a deal.

Okay, I'm done now I promise.

Shopping oh fun..for who I don't know Kagome maybe lol. Thanks for the new chappy I enjoy this story thanks for posting. Up date soon..

Girl, keep on do`in your thang! It was great!

love it.

Hehehe!!Funny ending !! LOve the story!!

i am so lovin ur story so hurry up n update

Loving it! Keep it coming!

For the LOVE of PETE PLEASSSE update this fabulous story!!! That chapter was so hot! ;)

you migth not get lots of updates but You rocks at writing no doubt about that!!! Update