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lovely. ^_^ can't wait to see where this is going, as always love it.

*laughs* I LOVE Rin, the comment that Sesshomaru must have hit his head because he was acting strange and humming was so perfect! Please continue this story.

lovely as always, i wonder what Sess thinks of Kags house ^_^

Sry didn't review the other chapters but i luv your story none the less. The music fits in just perfectly. Keep up the great work

very good story. and i didn't see to many mistakes. im really looking forward to reading more of this soon.

again you amaze me, i love that you switched Sinatra's thats been a favorite song of mine since i heard it on the soundtrack of 'Kill Bill' its a lovely sad song, but you use dit well as all others you have before, and may as well afterwards. I cannot wait for the next chapter to be posted. Btw, you may find fanfic . net might give you more reviews, just load slowly but steadily and you'll get a bit more constructive and positive critiques. either way i adore this story and again cannot wait for another chapter to be posted. thank you for writing. - r0o

Wonderful story so far! Please keep going.

I think you have an interesting story from what I read so far. Honestly, I didn't get very far from the first chapter. The spelling and grammar errors in your fic are very numerous and they break the flow of your story. Also, the Miss Bliss thing reminds me way too much of Saved By the Bell. There are alot of positive reviews so far for this fic. Many people seem to enjoy it and as a first time writer that is something you should be proud of. I really really suggest you get a beta for your story. They can help with the spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors in your chapters. Or if you can't find a beta try just simple spell check or someone you know to look over it before posting.

I think it's great that you've taken up writing as something to do in your spare time. My husband too is in the military and this is my way of spending my day when he is not here.

I hope you don't take my advice as flaming. I really think you could improve this fic a whole hell of a lot just by correcting simple errors.

Well it's really odd in places not so much plot or whatever, which is pretty good so far, but spelling/word choice, it's loon not lune for instance & I have no idea what this hume thing is, the closest thing that I can find is 'Hyuuman', which as can be seen, obviously is a bastardized way of saying 'human'. Other than that it means the same thing as 'home', it's an older variation & is the name of a long standing Scottish family. It has no place in the Japanese language. I'd just change it to human or ningen depending on whether you want to use Japanese or English so that you don't confuse people. Hope this is helpful.

Wow! That was a great chapter. I can't wait to find out more what her vision is about! And I like how Sess was at a loss for words for once. It shows his sweeter side. =)