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February 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
waaah! Kawaii! I so luv it! Pwease pwomise that you will update soon! Pweaty pweaty pwease? I'm addicted to your story! Sankyu for posting it! X3
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February 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Totally loved it.. I have read an awful lot out here with my very fav, Sheshy and Kags, and they all see to make him ooc.. I love that in this story of yours, that he is truly more in tune with what he should be.. Inu's older bro who is a complete hard ass... Love it and can't wait to see more.
Thanks for the great story
Alpine
Thanks for the great story
Alpine
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February 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Update Soon!
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February 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love this story and the way you portray Kag/Sess. can't wait to read more!!
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February 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Im sorry to hear about the power outage, i know all too well how thats like and how boring it could be.
Me and my bf were living in Virginia when a hurricane came and took the power out for at least 4 weeks.
It was hell, we resorted to a bunch of things, tried to cook hot dogs on candles once... O.o you know the flame of a candle wont cook a hot dog, just make it black and bitter while still being cold...That wasn't pleasant... As for the story, somethings at first made me dislike it,
such as the grammar and the way you word different sentences, for example in the first few sentences you would type something like
"Sesshomaru slightly narrowed his eyes making her froze in her display.
At the hard look the demon Lord was sending her way,
Kagome knew that she had say something stupid…again.
But hey, when there is someone bitten by a snake and such,
they always said that you had to suck the poison out with your mouth.
She was not crazy, there are proofs of what she had tell err screamed at him.
A lot of them ! They always do that… in movies."
I would have written.
"Sesshoumaru narrowed his eyes making her freeze in her display,
at the hard look the demon lord was sending her way.
Kagome knew she had said something stupid...Again.
But hey, when there is someone bitten by a snake and such,
they always say you have to suck the poison out with your mouth.
She wasnt crazy, theres proof of what she had said..er, screamed at him.
Alot of people, they always do that... In movies."
I found i could ignore this however if i just imagine that it was words of my choosing i was reading, instead of yours.
But then i came to Naraku and his god awful laugh....Seriously...Who says kukuku?
How does that laugh even go in real life?
I mean it doesn't make him scary when hes laughing that way, why would you write kukuku,
it makes me think hes wearing a pink dress, saying oh i feel so pretty KUKUKU!
Besides that I rated each chapter the highest it could go because some of the story is really good, and I like it other then that god awful laugh, why cant you write *he chuckles* or something instead of kukuku? Come on! Ok im done with my rant lol.
Good luck on the next installment.
Me and my bf were living in Virginia when a hurricane came and took the power out for at least 4 weeks.
It was hell, we resorted to a bunch of things, tried to cook hot dogs on candles once... O.o you know the flame of a candle wont cook a hot dog, just make it black and bitter while still being cold...That wasn't pleasant... As for the story, somethings at first made me dislike it,
such as the grammar and the way you word different sentences, for example in the first few sentences you would type something like
"Sesshomaru slightly narrowed his eyes making her froze in her display.
At the hard look the demon Lord was sending her way,
Kagome knew that she had say something stupid…again.
But hey, when there is someone bitten by a snake and such,
they always said that you had to suck the poison out with your mouth.
She was not crazy, there are proofs of what she had tell err screamed at him.
A lot of them ! They always do that… in movies."
I would have written.
"Sesshoumaru narrowed his eyes making her freeze in her display,
at the hard look the demon lord was sending her way.
Kagome knew she had said something stupid...Again.
But hey, when there is someone bitten by a snake and such,
they always say you have to suck the poison out with your mouth.
She wasnt crazy, theres proof of what she had said..er, screamed at him.
Alot of people, they always do that... In movies."
I found i could ignore this however if i just imagine that it was words of my choosing i was reading, instead of yours.
But then i came to Naraku and his god awful laugh....Seriously...Who says kukuku?
How does that laugh even go in real life?
I mean it doesn't make him scary when hes laughing that way, why would you write kukuku,
it makes me think hes wearing a pink dress, saying oh i feel so pretty KUKUKU!
Besides that I rated each chapter the highest it could go because some of the story is really good, and I like it other then that god awful laugh, why cant you write *he chuckles* or something instead of kukuku? Come on! Ok im done with my rant lol.
Good luck on the next installment.
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February 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Bloody good story progression, oh my this is getting so good, i love the thoughts of sesshoumaru they seem so cannon and what u would think he would do in such a situation. Poor kags, naraku has some devious plans for her, and when sesshoumaru figures it out i cant wait to see his reactions. I love your strong. chin-up kagome, she really is fighting. I love that too. keep up the great work and update soon.
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February 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was a nice chapter. Please continue.
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February 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am glad that Sesshoumaru finally decided to help her with her nightmare. I hope they find a way to get out soon. Nice chapter. Cant wait for more.
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February 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am so happy you are ok! And very happy that you still updated! This was a great chater, albeit a shot one. But I hope you update soon!
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February 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow. lol odd but cute chappy