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for The Break In

by sexydivine

schedule February 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I'm laughing so hard right now it's not even funny.
schedule January 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. You really could've fleshed out the first chapter more with Inuyasha's profession and personality, as well as when he met Kagome, but you've still got a decent setup. Update soon, plz.
schedule January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
what a start.
schedule January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well.. I like it when Inuyasha talks dirty as much as the next girl. Kinda hot actually-- I'm gonna have to be completely honest, there needs to be more detail and the plot should be a little more, oh whats the word, solid. You have a good idea, I think, it just needs some sorting out.