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Again, nice job with the realism. Most people would have just had InuYasha jump kagome after her declaration of wanting to become pregnant. Personally, I wasn't really expecting you to incorperate Mrs. Higurashi into the story the way you did. I immagined that you would most likely have her find out through seeing Kagome start to show. However, this approach gives InuYasha a more mature image (wanting to get the mother's blessing before hand), and you were able to bring up some of his concerns relating back to his past as a hanyou. I really did enjoy reading the excerpt involving Mrs. Higurashi and InuYasha. Though she isn't a very well defined character within the anime series, from what is shown of her personality, you pretty much summed up what her reaction would be like. Also, nice job at showing Kagome's enthusiasm in finally getting a yes from InuYasha, and switching up her personality a little bit to become more dominating (as though the initial shyness has worn off and she's become bolder). I am very happy by the way to hear that this will not actually be the last chapter in this fanfic (there is still quite a lot you can do). Therefore, I will be waiting (somewhat impatiently) for the next update.
[Damn good story]

Another great chapter in the bag, though I am sad to hear you say that there will only be one more chapter. I really liked how you put together the different chain of thoughts between InuYasha and Kagome. I believe that what you put down for InuYasha's reaction was absolutly perfect; happy with a little bit of uneasesiness because of Kagome's reaction. Also, the way that you had Kagome come to the realization of the fact that she too wanted a child (a lot sooner than previously expected) was a very ralistic thought process.
Because the next chapter is going to be the last, there are just two things that I would really like for you to do. 1: make this the longest chapter you have written thus far.(in the winter I pretty much have no life outside of work and sleep, so in my free time I look up fanfiction for hours and I would rather use my time reading "good" fanfics. You actually know how to write.) 2: have Mrs. Higurashi's reaction to Kagome becoming pregnant.
Again, great job and please update soon.

Sorry it made you so hungry. . .I watch too much food network. But your story has been delicious! I'm hoping that with a chapter title like equilibrium, you're gonna ballance the scales in terms of lemons. . .poor Kagome has been neglected. It almost feels as if she's a third wheel at some points rather than the initiator of the relationships. I did like the differentiation between the two pairs though. . .although I think Kagome is stronger than that. Oh well. . .the story is good anyway.

great update... as expected of kagome... since it's in her character to be happy for the ones she loves... and glad that she's finally made a decision on what she wants with her life with inuyasha & sango... wonder what inuyasha & sango will say... how will they react... update as soon as you can... looking forward to the last chapter... please and thank you...

I have to say, the way you added to the InuYasha/Sango section was very inventive. It has a much better length now in total, and you did a great job of portraying the full moon scene with Sango. The entire chapter was very well put together, and I'm expecting that the next chapter should be very eventful because of how this one was ended.
On another note, I am really enjoying your story so far and will be looking forward to more chapters (though I don't see why you think you can only get about 3 more chapters in). Furthermore, because of how well this story is turning out, anything you post I will be sure to read and review. (I'm also glad that you are another author who hates Koga, be sure to kill him or mame him in one of your fics)

Oh yeah I almost forgot. I'm glad that I was of some help in giving you new ideas. If you ever have the need for more inspiration I'd be happy to help, just send me an e-mail.

great update... kagome's news was good but sango's seemed better... not surprised that she'd be pregnant first since inuyasha & sango spent more time together that inuyasha & kagome... how will inuyasha & kagome react?... what will kagome do now... will inuyasha spend more time and pay attention to sango more now that she's pregnant... how will kagome feel... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you...

Overall it's a very well put together story in my personal opinion. It seems as though you actually put some thought into your story before writing it down, making it so that this fanfic is not just thrown together haphazardly. I liked how you explained the reason for InuYasha needing more than one mate in that his youkai is demanding of it. About your comment on trying to make Kagome and Sango "different" in their love making, you did a fairly decent job at doing just that. However, I believe that the portion of the fanfic with InuYasha/Sango was a little too short. I can't wait to see how you introduce InuYasha to the fact that Kagome and Sango are also lovers.
I'm not too sure as to what you have planned for th future chapters, but I believe it would be interesting to see what would happen if Miroku decided that he made a mistake and came back only to find Sango pregnant with InuYasha's pup. Just for a little more amusement, it would also be nice to see Koga beaten to a bloody pulp for trying to challenge InuYasha for Kagome (I hate that fucker). Another thing you could add to the story is Sango having to deal with a lust driven InuYasha during the full moon (partly because Kagome could have gone back to her time to take a test), and then Kagome getting to experiance a more passionate "human" InuYasha during the new moon.
Whatever you decide to do it's coming along great so far, and I can't wait for the next update.

Obssession, you read my mind on some of those points. I won't say which of course. On another point though, I think you may have given me a new idea to use, so I thank you. All I can do now is keep writing C.8 and sees where the flow takes me.

And yes, I think I might add to the Inu/San lemon later on, so there's a chance of that. Oh, and I'm pretty sure I did have a scene where Sango told Inuyasha she and Kagome were mates, but I think I'll improve his reaction.

Well, LadyCash has finally dragged her lazy self over to review.
This is good. Has good characterization, pacing, tension.
Fun to read, and leaves you with enough questions to bring you
back. Well done, looking forward to more!