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Great story. I plan on reading more if you plan on writing more. :)

Your Story is totally awesome.

I have a hunch, that Kagome and Sango will be very soon in Kagomes time...

Hell, it would be so much fun, if the whole group (including Seshy and Rin) would make the timeshift. ^^

Seshomaru in the future^. That would be so much fun, he he.

I'm eager to read more, since my tests are done and I have a month worth of freetime. Keep up your excellent work.

Oh yeah, he walked right into it!
Handled himself (and the girls) very well, though.
Steamy and hot like always.

Can't wait to see how you get Sango to Tokyo, but
have faith that it will unusual.

A concern, it's the new moon, IY's human night....
not so sure he'd be out in the open like that,
even with Naraku gone.
He might have gotten carried away, maybe, but to
sleep afterwards? Not so sure, Xag.

great update... quite intense... will sango be able to pass through the well... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you...

For once I really don't have much to say. You did a perfect job with the first threesome and it was a great length as well. But, I believe you should reread this chapter 'slowly' and fix a few grammatical errors. You left a couple of words out here and there and in the first little paragraph you put in an extra one.
Just trying to help. Please update soon, the anticipation of waiting to see which way you are going to take this story next is killing me!

This had me laughing most all the way through.
Poor InuYasha, having to handle not only two pregnant women and their weird cravings,
but to face the modern era to soothe them. Piling on the frieds was a cruel, but
hilarious touch.

I'd love to read more of IY in Tokyo. Much room there for mayhem, methinks.

Very nice lemon, but I think IY is about to walk right in over his head!
Yep, should be good! I feel sorry for him, yet want you to continue.
Hmmm, what does that say about me???

This chapter certianly had me laughing for a while. You perfectly matched Shippo's personality to the one portrayed in the anime. I new from how you were carrying on with Shippo and Kaede's conversation that some ludicris question was going to be asked. However, his last question caught me completly off guard (I had to stop reading for a while so that I could catch my breath from laughing too hard). InuYasha's little escapade in this chapter was also quite halarious. I thought it was played out perfectly the way that InuYasha had to struggle with the new form of currency at the market, and the way he had to go through the store without even knowing what half of the items looked like. The one part of any fanfic that I tend to enjoy most are the scenes that involve interaction between the trio of Eri, Yuka, and Ayumi, with either Kagome, InuYasha, or both. The way that this little group pries for information on any numer of subjects is just too damn funny. Again, everyone's personality was perfect, right down to how nervous InuYasha became after the strawberries were found (by the way, that was a great way to give that trio the assumption that something else is going on). I hope you plan on having at least one more scene with them (and I have a nice idea for that). I'm also looking forward to the next chapter because of the imposed theesome (just remember longer the better).
Ok, now for the part were I have to empty my overactive mind of all the senarios that I have thought up because of this story. I love the mention of trying to get Sango threw the well even though you hint at it not being possible. The one thing that I noticed about this fic is that you did not make use of the blood bond (where the female has to mark the male as well and take in some of their blood). I'm not sure if you ment to do this, but the way that you have everything set up right now leads one to assume that Kagome and Sango will still age as normal humans and die before InuYasha has even reached the half way point in his life span. If you were to edit the two chapters that contain the first time kagome and Sango make love to InuYasha, and incorperate the blood bond, this would mean that their souls have become bound together. This in turn would make them more alike and possibly make the well unable to diferentiate between the two, making it possible for Sango to pass.
(if you do the above) When Sango finally gets through the well you could have Eri, Yuka, and Ayumi drop by to check up on Kagome, only to have them find InuYasha lounging with "two" pregnant wemon giving rise to the belief that the other was the one InuYasha was two timing on Kagome with.
While InuYasha, Kagome, and Sango are on the other side of the well, Miroku could come back to try and make ammens with Sango. During his stay Shippo being the oblivious kitsune that he is would attempt to ask him why InuYasha impregnated "both" Kagome and Sango. Then (if you even go this route) you could have Miroku errupt in blind rage and when Sango comes back through the well he attempts to place a sutra on her belly in an attempt to purify the pup resulting in an enraged hanyou beating him sensless and tossing him out of the village under the threat of death if he ever returns (yes, I'm not a huge fan of Miroku either but I don't exactaly hate him).
All right, now I can sleep without my mind constantly bombarding me with new ideas. I hope some of this helps you to be able to write more, and in the meantime I'll be waiting for the next update.

I wasn't sure if I should bring this up or not but.... Ah Hell with it! In ch5 when you added the part about blood bonding InuYasha first asks "Will you accept me claiming you as my mate? Accept me marking you as mine, and mine alone." Then you added "And, you know... if you do the same to me, it means that...(ect)" When InuYasha said if you do the same to me you were having him refer to 'marking.' What you had Kagome do, did not leave any type of 'mark' on InuYasha. So, to 'fix' this all you would have to do is replace "if you do the same to me" with something along the lines of "if you take in some of my blood." Although it could also be changed to have InuYasha just cut along his forarm or wrist and have her bite down there. But then you would have to docter up the part with Sango a bit. (please don't hate me for bringing this up)
I will commend you though on the fact that the way each took in InuYasha's blood did help with making each of them different in their love making as you did state you were trying to do (early on).
I have no actual complaints about what you've added I'm just a little anal retentive when it comes to detail. Anyway, I'm glad that I was able to help point something out for you, and I know that I have already stated this once but I will do so again. If you need any kind of help I'm always here.... I mean board. Contact me at obsession_1988@yahoo.com (I check it every day at 10:00PM unless I'm expecting something ~ or I try to anyways)
And just so you know I don't go around throwing my help everywhere (I just like the way you write and think that you could easily pull off some of my ideas)

Xag,

Mmm . . .much better. I really liked that you had him go talk to 'Gome's mom. That's really mature of him and it makes him seem more ready for children. We get a three-way in the next chappy? 'Cause that would just be whipped deliciousness.

:) Yum.

great update... nice of inuyasha to tell kagome's mom... really sweet of inuyasha to ask kagome how she feels about everything... hope kagome does get pregnant... it'll be quite funny how inuyasha will deal with two pregnant women... will miroku come back to visit them... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you...