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March 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
great update... cute scenes with rin & kohaku... seems that sango & kagome are in labor now... wonder how inuyasha will handle them both... will be quite a funny and interesting chapter... also kaede will need help with the births... update soon... please and thank you...
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March 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww that's just depressing. The last chapter.
Anyways, great job with the Sesshomaru Rin conversation. I loved how you had him react to everything he was presented with. Rin can be quite a handful because of her lack of knowledge. what she may see as a harmless question may be something on an entirely different level for the person she is asking. (I have seen this happen many times with my cousins). The little bit that you added there at the end of their conversation was absolutely perfect, and also very true (well at least for most guys). Having her thank Sesshomaru for helping her out with how guys view love actually had me thinking. Before I read Rin's thoughts I was under the same assumption that Sesshomaru was under. That he was of no help at all. However, having Rin's mind fallow that line of thought shows a little more intelligence than most would believe she had. Personally I loved it.
I was a little disappointed though, that the Kohaku/Rin section was not longer. It was just starting to get good. Though I will admit that to fallow that story line would mean veering off from the actual story.
lastly I also enjoyed the little conversations that Sango had with InuYasha while having contractions. They weren't overly hilarious but they were pretty funny. I bet I can also guess how you will explain how/why Kagome is going to be giving birth at the same time as Sango. However, I will not say anything in this review in case there are people who do not want anything ruined for them or given away who may be reading my reviews.
The only thing that currently keeps me from completely flipping out right now it the little "to be continued" at the bottom of your fic. Hope it comes soon.
Anyways, great job with the Sesshomaru Rin conversation. I loved how you had him react to everything he was presented with. Rin can be quite a handful because of her lack of knowledge. what she may see as a harmless question may be something on an entirely different level for the person she is asking. (I have seen this happen many times with my cousins). The little bit that you added there at the end of their conversation was absolutely perfect, and also very true (well at least for most guys). Having her thank Sesshomaru for helping her out with how guys view love actually had me thinking. Before I read Rin's thoughts I was under the same assumption that Sesshomaru was under. That he was of no help at all. However, having Rin's mind fallow that line of thought shows a little more intelligence than most would believe she had. Personally I loved it.
I was a little disappointed though, that the Kohaku/Rin section was not longer. It was just starting to get good. Though I will admit that to fallow that story line would mean veering off from the actual story.
lastly I also enjoyed the little conversations that Sango had with InuYasha while having contractions. They weren't overly hilarious but they were pretty funny. I bet I can also guess how you will explain how/why Kagome is going to be giving birth at the same time as Sango. However, I will not say anything in this review in case there are people who do not want anything ruined for them or given away who may be reading my reviews.
The only thing that currently keeps me from completely flipping out right now it the little "to be continued" at the bottom of your fic. Hope it comes soon.
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March 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Don't worry, you did a fine job with the baby shower. I (being a guy myself) do not know all THAT much about baby showers, however I have had to show up at a few of them in order to save some of my friends from the whole experiance. So, I at least know some of what happens (but don't ever fully want to know). The little bit with the cake was interesting, but I would have expected that type of reaction for an enormous amount of ramen. Also, (this is just me being very technical again) dogs mainly die from eating chcolate so I don't think that InuYasha would have eaten that cake. Unless you already knew this and were just using it as a joke.
What a perfect way to end this chapter. Sesshomaru is definatly not the person to be asking that type of question. I can't wait to see what his reaction is going to be.
All in all this chapter flowed pretty well and there were only a few spelling errors and extra words added so I'd say that again you did a very good job (considering you have no Beta... that's still true right?).
What a perfect way to end this chapter. Sesshomaru is definatly not the person to be asking that type of question. I can't wait to see what his reaction is going to be.
All in all this chapter flowed pretty well and there were only a few spelling errors and extra words added so I'd say that again you did a very good job (considering you have no Beta... that's still true right?).
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March 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter. Lol! Rin gets the best line award for this chapter...,'lazy bum', priceless. Sess's left eye must be twitching about now.
Being a male author myself I too would have a huge problem writing about a baby shower. However, since this is based off of an Anime, what happened here could possibly happen in an Anime setting. At least Inu's mishap. Hm, I've always wondered if inu youkai could eat chocolate unlike their dog cousins.
This Mewtwo will wait on the next chapter.
Being a male author myself I too would have a huge problem writing about a baby shower. However, since this is based off of an Anime, what happened here could possibly happen in an Anime setting. At least Inu's mishap. Hm, I've always wondered if inu youkai could eat chocolate unlike their dog cousins.
This Mewtwo will wait on the next chapter.
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March 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 17
I must say that the whole scene with the EYA trio was very well done. Yuka's reaction upon first entering their room to find InuYasha fucking someone other than Kagome was perfect. It was very realistic how at first she was so furious that she did not even recognize what it was exactally that she was witnessing. Then she finally calmed down enough to reevaluate the situation and realise that Kagome was acting as just an observer to the whole situation. I don't think I could have done a better job myself. However, I will say that there was one thing I believe should have done a little differently. When everyone finally realizes that Sota was listening in on their conversation you didn't have any type of reaction from InuYasha. I know that he was not really in a condition to have any type of a 'normall' reaction, but it would have been nice to at least have what he was thinking at that moment written out.
There was really only one surpprise for me in this chapter and that was Eri. I was fully prepared and expecting one of the girls to come out and ask if Kagome would mind sharing InuYasha with any of them as well, but I was not however prepared for Eri asking about Sango. Now that I think about it though, I believe Yuka and Aumi should have had a little bit more of a reaction to just finding out that one of their closest friends was bi. I would have expected them to become a little apprehensive about being too close to her. I mean, just finding something like that out would make a lot of people nervous or at the very least a little uneasy around that person now that there may be a chance they're attracted to you.
Other than those two things the whole chapter was very well put together and very easy to fallow (you didn't jumble anything up or make it seem too cluttered). Nice job.
I must say that the whole scene with the EYA trio was very well done. Yuka's reaction upon first entering their room to find InuYasha fucking someone other than Kagome was perfect. It was very realistic how at first she was so furious that she did not even recognize what it was exactally that she was witnessing. Then she finally calmed down enough to reevaluate the situation and realise that Kagome was acting as just an observer to the whole situation. I don't think I could have done a better job myself. However, I will say that there was one thing I believe should have done a little differently. When everyone finally realizes that Sota was listening in on their conversation you didn't have any type of reaction from InuYasha. I know that he was not really in a condition to have any type of a 'normall' reaction, but it would have been nice to at least have what he was thinking at that moment written out.
There was really only one surpprise for me in this chapter and that was Eri. I was fully prepared and expecting one of the girls to come out and ask if Kagome would mind sharing InuYasha with any of them as well, but I was not however prepared for Eri asking about Sango. Now that I think about it though, I believe Yuka and Aumi should have had a little bit more of a reaction to just finding out that one of their closest friends was bi. I would have expected them to become a little apprehensive about being too close to her. I mean, just finding something like that out would make a lot of people nervous or at the very least a little uneasy around that person now that there may be a chance they're attracted to you.
Other than those two things the whole chapter was very well put together and very easy to fallow (you didn't jumble anything up or make it seem too cluttered). Nice job.
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March 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 18
Naughty little children. You're just having a lot of fun with Sota, Shippo, and Rin aren't you. Rin chose the 'perfect' person or rather youkai to tell THAT secret to. Shippo can't ever keep his mouth closed so he just has to blurt it out. I hope you do incorperate that conversation between InuYasha and Sesshomaru. That holds many promises.
I thought it was actually very clean and easy the way that you had Sango pretty much tell Sota to back off. That was a pretty unhealthy attraction for Sota to habe, because if it were to get too serious then InuYasha would have to step in.
I don't believe I have ever read a story that even hinted at a Rin Kohaku pairing. It will be interesting to see were this leads.
Question: what are you doing for Kohaku's opinion of InuYasha's mating with both Kagome and his sister? You did not mention wether or not he knows who the father is yet or for that matter have him in the story at all. Not sure but isn't this the first time he's come into your story? Being a demon slayer he should have some type of reaction to his only sister mating with a hanyou. I mean traveling with one and learning to coexist are one thing but.... I think you get were I'm going.
That's just positively evil, busting Sesshomaru like that.... I love it. But because you chose to use Kagome's heightened sense of smell, I hope you do not dismiss the fact that InuYasha would have a much easier time detecting a forign smell on his brother. Oh the possibilities.
Hope you update soon.
Naughty little children. You're just having a lot of fun with Sota, Shippo, and Rin aren't you. Rin chose the 'perfect' person or rather youkai to tell THAT secret to. Shippo can't ever keep his mouth closed so he just has to blurt it out. I hope you do incorperate that conversation between InuYasha and Sesshomaru. That holds many promises.
I thought it was actually very clean and easy the way that you had Sango pretty much tell Sota to back off. That was a pretty unhealthy attraction for Sota to habe, because if it were to get too serious then InuYasha would have to step in.
I don't believe I have ever read a story that even hinted at a Rin Kohaku pairing. It will be interesting to see were this leads.
Question: what are you doing for Kohaku's opinion of InuYasha's mating with both Kagome and his sister? You did not mention wether or not he knows who the father is yet or for that matter have him in the story at all. Not sure but isn't this the first time he's come into your story? Being a demon slayer he should have some type of reaction to his only sister mating with a hanyou. I mean traveling with one and learning to coexist are one thing but.... I think you get were I'm going.
That's just positively evil, busting Sesshomaru like that.... I love it. But because you chose to use Kagome's heightened sense of smell, I hope you do not dismiss the fact that InuYasha would have a much easier time detecting a forign smell on his brother. Oh the possibilities.
Hope you update soon.
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March 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter. I'll ignore the other couples in this story. I'm parcial to SessxRen, but I won't complain. Hope to see the next one soon.
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March 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
great update... that was an interesting chapter... they handled it better that what was expected... that's a good thing for kagome though... glad that they're all together again... now just waiting on the birth of the pups... update when you can... please and thank you...
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March 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter. You'll pardon me for not believing you that the next chapter is going to be the last one. What was that at the end of this chapter? What the fox react like that when Sess grunted? Or was it his reaction to Sess snoring? Lol! Anyway, this Mewtwo shall wait for the next chapter.
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March 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i did reviewed you once... but who cares im just gonna say you catch perfectly the way inuyasha and kagome are specially sango too, also the plot is very HOT, beautiful cool and more... keep it going plz... i wanna know how do imagine kagomes kids... to see if they are the same way i think...
btw i imagined something like that night when kagomes friend discovered inu.... i think it would be like that XD
btw i imagined something like that night when kagomes friend discovered inu.... i think it would be like that XD