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June 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just read the chapter when the babies are born. My son is 7 months old and you got the birth TOTALLY correct. I have never been louder, meaner, or have a dirtier mouth then when I was in labor. Well done!
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 22
Damn.... that was just.... damn. Ok, this was definitely one of your better chapters. That has to be the longest lemon you have written so far. It's also one of the only times where all I can say about the length is that it was perfect. You really enjoy turning Kagome and Sango into little wanton bitches don't you?
I also loved the way that you ended this chapter. Having Kohaku and Rin get a free show was most unexpected, but utterly enjoyable to read. At least now they won't need to ask any questions pertaining to either what Kagome Sango and InuYasha were out doing or what "to" do when they get old enough.
Backing up to the beginning of this story however, I do have one thing to say about the way you put that together. I may not be an expert, or experienced in any way on this topic, but I think that you should have written the beginning with Kagome and Sango more exhausted. I was under the assumption that right after birthing, the new mothers would be too tired to do anything other than fall asleep shortly after first seeing their newborn baby. Even if they weren't, and wanted to get some nourishment into the newborn before they nodded off, I still believe that it would be somewhat of a struggle for them to stay awake. Personally I would have moved that breastfeeding conversation into the next day were they would have been more alert and not so drained.
Damn.... that was just.... damn. Ok, this was definitely one of your better chapters. That has to be the longest lemon you have written so far. It's also one of the only times where all I can say about the length is that it was perfect. You really enjoy turning Kagome and Sango into little wanton bitches don't you?
I also loved the way that you ended this chapter. Having Kohaku and Rin get a free show was most unexpected, but utterly enjoyable to read. At least now they won't need to ask any questions pertaining to either what Kagome Sango and InuYasha were out doing or what "to" do when they get old enough.
Backing up to the beginning of this story however, I do have one thing to say about the way you put that together. I may not be an expert, or experienced in any way on this topic, but I think that you should have written the beginning with Kagome and Sango more exhausted. I was under the assumption that right after birthing, the new mothers would be too tired to do anything other than fall asleep shortly after first seeing their newborn baby. Even if they weren't, and wanted to get some nourishment into the newborn before they nodded off, I still believe that it would be somewhat of a struggle for them to stay awake. Personally I would have moved that breastfeeding conversation into the next day were they would have been more alert and not so drained.
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 23
That.... was not what I expected to happen at the end. Miroku showing up as Ayame's mate?! That was definitely a shock. I know you said you had other plans for Ayame in your story, but honestly I never thought you would have meant anything like that. Now don't get me wrong, I don't condone this pairing, it's just that it was the farthest thing from my mind.
I thought it was a great idea to have each of the children refer to their second mom (the one that did not actually give birth to them) as either mommy Kagome or mommy Sango. It is a nice way to differentiate who each child is referring to. And the bit about playing fetch, that was a nice add in. It's always good to have some humor thrown in.
Well, you did a wonderful job with this story and I'll be looking forward to the next one. (I wonder. Just how many women do you plan on making Miroku sleep with before he gets to Ayame.....)
That.... was not what I expected to happen at the end. Miroku showing up as Ayame's mate?! That was definitely a shock. I know you said you had other plans for Ayame in your story, but honestly I never thought you would have meant anything like that. Now don't get me wrong, I don't condone this pairing, it's just that it was the farthest thing from my mind.
I thought it was a great idea to have each of the children refer to their second mom (the one that did not actually give birth to them) as either mommy Kagome or mommy Sango. It is a nice way to differentiate who each child is referring to. And the bit about playing fetch, that was a nice add in. It's always good to have some humor thrown in.
Well, you did a wonderful job with this story and I'll be looking forward to the next one. (I wonder. Just how many women do you plan on making Miroku sleep with before he gets to Ayame.....)
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April 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for one amazing story.
I liked it very much.
Epecially that Kagomes Friends are now familiar with all of her adventures.
Maybe you can get them included in you next story as well? (Sure it is Mirokus and Ayames story after all ^^ But Hope never dies). Thank you very much.
I liked it very much.
Epecially that Kagomes Friends are now familiar with all of her adventures.
Maybe you can get them included in you next story as well? (Sure it is Mirokus and Ayames story after all ^^ But Hope never dies). Thank you very much.
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April 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 21
Ok, this chapter was pretty well done. All of the scenes with Kagome and Sango were fairly accurate (because of my never having witnessed or overheard a birthing I can't really judge this part too well). I will say however that InuYasha should have been a little bit more flustered and not as calm as he was at the time he went back into the hut after his little duel with Sesshomaru. That little bit was a bit of a surprise for me but it was obviously well thought out. It was defiantly a very good way to keep InuYasha's mind off of his current concerns without taxing him further.
The part were you added Koga was a bit interesting. I was not expecting you to ever use him in this story at all. I'm glad that you kept up his normal attitude towards InuYasha (great job there). He is way to full of himself.
I must admit as well that the way you had Kagome remove InuYasha's rosary was very creative. I was beginning to wonder whether or not you were ever going to have it removed or if she was going to always have that type of control over him. I may have mentioned this to you before but I don't really care too much for the rosary.
Ok, this chapter was pretty well done. All of the scenes with Kagome and Sango were fairly accurate (because of my never having witnessed or overheard a birthing I can't really judge this part too well). I will say however that InuYasha should have been a little bit more flustered and not as calm as he was at the time he went back into the hut after his little duel with Sesshomaru. That little bit was a bit of a surprise for me but it was obviously well thought out. It was defiantly a very good way to keep InuYasha's mind off of his current concerns without taxing him further.
The part were you added Koga was a bit interesting. I was not expecting you to ever use him in this story at all. I'm glad that you kept up his normal attitude towards InuYasha (great job there). He is way to full of himself.
I must admit as well that the way you had Kagome remove InuYasha's rosary was very creative. I was beginning to wonder whether or not you were ever going to have it removed or if she was going to always have that type of control over him. I may have mentioned this to you before but I don't really care too much for the rosary.
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April 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This has certainly been a good story. Hmmmmm, the Miroku flashback story sounds intriguing. Hope to see that one up soon. I would advise you to move this one to the threesome/moresome section.
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April 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Alright, more smut! Been a long time. Hopefully you are setting up for a sequel.
This Mewtwo thanks you for the smut and will be waiting for the next chapter.
This Mewtwo thanks you for the smut and will be waiting for the next chapter.
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April 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i love this story. it's going on my favourites. please write more stories sometime...Thankyou for all your work on this!
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April 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter. It's hard to right a 'giving birth' scene when you're trying to match it with the historical time like this story takes place in.
If my history is correct, back in the 50's, fahters weren't allowed in the delivery room. Of course, that's American history. It would take some digging to find what actually happened during labor back in the Feudal Era of Japan.
Hope to see the next chapter soon and hope to see some more good lemons soon as well.
If my history is correct, back in the 50's, fahters weren't allowed in the delivery room. Of course, that's American history. It would take some digging to find what actually happened during labor back in the Feudal Era of Japan.
Hope to see the next chapter soon and hope to see some more good lemons soon as well.
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March 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, Inu has got problems now. Both going into labor? Kag is early. Pup must be inpatient.
That had to be the most uncomfortable situation for Sess.
This Mewtwo will be waiting on the next chapter
BTW, anyone know where the mate mark orginated? I know it was a fandom thing, but who started it?
That had to be the most uncomfortable situation for Sess.
This Mewtwo will be waiting on the next chapter
BTW, anyone know where the mate mark orginated? I know it was a fandom thing, but who started it?