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July 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ohayo! I like your story! umm just a few things that I noticed though.
Koibito- is used by females for their males
Anata- it the same thing as koibito
Koishi- I believe is what you meant. Since it was Kurama calling Kagome Koibito, which should have been Koishi
aisai- is also what should replace anata.
just thought I'd help, I really do like your one shot though!
Ja Ne
Infinite Silence
Koibito- is used by females for their males
Anata- it the same thing as koibito
Koishi- I believe is what you meant. Since it was Kurama calling Kagome Koibito, which should have been Koishi
aisai- is also what should replace anata.
just thought I'd help, I really do like your one shot though!
Ja Ne
Infinite Silence
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this, I've read it 3 times already. 1 thing though there seem to be missing words here & there starting in the 1st paragraph you have pre-lit Christmas & no tree after. Hope this helps & I'm looking forward to reading whatever you do next.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
what a great oneshot!!!! you should continue to do more oneshots like these ^_~ by the way, I really liked that last sentance hehe, it sure adds a touch to it
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December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Cute! The bra on the tree was a great touch!
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December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great one-shot! I'm a real lover of Kagome/Kurama! It was well written too. Hoping to read from you again,and Merry Christmas!