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July 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
this was excellent. keep up the good work and writing
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March 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOW love it please update soon i would love to read more TTFN Marrosa
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March 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
please update soon. please tell us of how the two demons meet up with the rest of the group and what happens after.
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March 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
O_O WooooooooooooooooooooW at first when i read the first chap i wuz like omg this is totally weird but as it progressed i found that I ABSOLUTELY LOOOOOOOOOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i hope to read more soon so keep up the good job :D
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February 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this story was interesting and original. it was good with teh thing about InuYasha hurting Kagome, cause i dnt like them together - i like her ans Sesshoumaru =] but i cant say that i liked InuYasha and Sesshoumaru together as an intimate couple. its kinda disgusting brothers doing that. lol. but it was good apart from that. =D
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January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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December 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good so far!
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November 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hm...I enjoyed it up until the point where they both enter her at once...Unless she just naturally has a very large entrance, it would be physically impossible for both of them to enter her at once with little-to-no foreplay involving penetration, and without her having had any previous hugely-stretching experience...With her hymen still intact, regardless of whether or not she is meant to tear, they wouldnt both fit without truly tearing her clean open (i.e. tearing past the frenulum, and possibly through the vaginal wall as well (due to sudden stretching without any past use))..thus leaving her to die of blood loss..etc..I hate to be a wet blanket and ruin fanfictions involving demons/etc with scientific stuff, but it really is quite off-putting when I cannot visualize what is happening to her human body, because of the fact that it *cannot* happen.
haha other than that, however, I have no complaints! ^-^ good job
haha other than that, however, I have no complaints! ^-^ good job
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November 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
DAMN! Woooo hooo. Please update soon. I finally read this fic and it sounds funny in a way.
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November 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your improvement is vastly stunning. I can't wait to read the next one! You can email me if you like at melrosefaulkner@yahoo.com. I do some beta'ing, but I get busy throughout the school year with planning lessons and grading tests, papers, so forth and so on. LOL
You're welcome for the advice. I like to offer some when I can and always hope people take it for what it is. Not an insult but a bit of help to improve and become better. I can give a little more advice, and that is to find some of the well-written fics and read them. Figure out what makes them good and use them to improve your own. That's how I started. I am particular to Rinseternalsoul and Kogas Angel and quite a few more.
Your pace is a lot better, and your meaning is more clear.
Take care until next time! I will be waiting for the update.
Hope you had a great Thanksgiving and an even better Holiday season. (And, that Santa is good to you. LOL)
You're welcome for the advice. I like to offer some when I can and always hope people take it for what it is. Not an insult but a bit of help to improve and become better. I can give a little more advice, and that is to find some of the well-written fics and read them. Figure out what makes them good and use them to improve your own. That's how I started. I am particular to Rinseternalsoul and Kogas Angel and quite a few more.
Your pace is a lot better, and your meaning is more clear.
Take care until next time! I will be waiting for the update.
Hope you had a great Thanksgiving and an even better Holiday season. (And, that Santa is good to you. LOL)