rate_review Reviews

This was a great story! I'm glad i didn't have to wait to read the whole thing, I'm new to fanfic, so I'm lucky there.

I love the beginning, so beautifully described. The spelling or grammatical errors i did see didn't stand out enough for me to remember exactly what or where they were. I edit a lot of writing, so normally I'd have taken notes, but this is for pleasure and fun, so it's not as important as just enjoying the story.

I liked the combination of angst and humor. But I confess that your comedic stories so far are my favorites.

Keep up the great work! I'll Leo coming back to read more of all your stories. So far I've only been reading Inuyasha FanFic, and I'm lovin it

i guess i was one of the lucky ones to come across this now istead of having all that time to wait. Though it would have been worth it. Didn't see the human Inuyasha being the one to be in the cave, caught me off guard, not an easy thing to do, though my mind was running slow with images of a naked Inuyasha..drool, drool...yummy.

Wow... Wow... Just absolutely WOW! I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the GREAT work!

ok well not badd ur descriptions in ur story r verii good. Nd i feel tat ur story will go a long way. but ur telling us nd not rele showing us wat exactly is goin on. also more dialogue nd possibly thoughts wuld make ur story verii interesting. otherwise verii good on the plot nd the conflict was obviously clear due 2 the lustful hanyou.

yea! I can't wait. I agree, even though the story line isn't new, I still totally enjoy it. Keep going, I can't wait! Thanks for your hard work.

I liked it I really did. It's a good start and I would like to see the next to see how the next two chapters layout. I'm a sucker for angsty smutty smut. The only thing that bothers me is the title. I don't know why but I'm not really feeling it. As far as you proof reading, I thought you did a pretty decent job. There is nothing I hate more, then when I come across a fic that seems like it was slopped together and the writer didn't give two shits what it looked like. That fortunately isn't the case here ^_^ Anyway keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to more!

great job. really enjoyable to read your writing

You're right, pasta is pasta, and we still want to eat it. Thus smut is smut, and I still want to read it, and that's why I'm here. I congratulate you for trying to edit your own work, but you still might try to find a beta out there. There are a few cases of verb tense, grammatical mistakes, and just down right word confusion. If you still have to edit yourself, try reading it aloud. It helps a lot.

Keep on with the smut!~ I got to love it for what it is.

just wanted to let you know awesome story, but you spelt two words wrong. It's youkai, not yookai. And it's hanyou, not hanyoo

*raises hand* I like spaghetti and meatballs. :-D