rate_review Reviews

Okay, Sesshomaru would never refer to himself as 'this Sesshomaru', nor would he
ever be so forward, and if he kidnapped Kagome, I doubt that's how he would do it.
And since when does Rin refer to herself by her own name!? I can't stand it when the
characters are out of character. A story with Sesshomaru just isn't good at all if he
doens't act the way he's supposed to. Rin or Kagome I could get over, not my favorite
character. I like him the way he is, mean, cruel, sadistic, and mysterious. And I doubt
if I'm the only one who thinks so.
I just had to get that off my chest.

Chapter 3 was slightly better. It could still use a lot of work.
No offense (and I really do mean that) but if I wasn't so bored
right now, I wouldn't bothered continuing with the story. Goodnigt,
I have GOT to get some sleep. I really didn't mean to seem rude or
offend you, but I had to state my opinion. Besides, learn from
mistakes.