rate_review Reviews

This was very interesting for a first chapter. Your persons (first and third person) keep swapping, and you should considering finding a beta. I am not trying to be insultive or anything, but there are several errors in this. A beta could help you make yourself more easily understood. That's all.

Still a good first chapter. I look forward to reading more soon. Take care.

good start but you kept going from first pov to third pov and you spelled his name wrong it's Sesshomaru or Sesshoumaru