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August 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story was good over all, I can't really say great cause I've read better but it was good. However the ending was... I'm truely sorry to say this.... complete crap. Though your not a half bad writer, you just need some more practice. And for the love of god read your own work, there where several places where the scene repeated itself at least once just slightly different and the grammar it wasn't bad horrible but it could use some work. Best of luck.
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December 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
and they lived happily ever after... I loved this-- very good-- very dramatic!
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November 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow! That was really good. My only complaint is -- it could have been a few more chappies but I tottally loved it! Perfect 10... reminds me.. I gots to finish mine..
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November 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Bring on the Epilong. Love this story. You still need to continue this story.
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October 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Though you could use a good beta and the names, along with the timeline, are a bit confused in places, it's a very good story and you should continue writing it.
I look forward to future chapters.
I look forward to future chapters.
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October 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
watch malapropisms and typos... a quick read over and spell check will catch some of them.
i am so glad that yash and kagome will get together in this. i can't see him getting too irrational about the wish, after all she was nearly raped and felt helpless and weak.
good chapter.
thank you,
ginny
i am so glad that yash and kagome will get together in this. i can't see him getting too irrational about the wish, after all she was nearly raped and felt helpless and weak.
good chapter.
thank you,
ginny
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October 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hurry up on the next chapters.
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October 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i don't usually go for the 'kagome turns youkai' but this is quite interesting. i'm confused as to why sesshoumaru doesn't want yasha to see kagome, i wouldn't think it would matter to him especially considering who he's with.
thank you,
ginny
thank you,
ginny
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September 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hay what happened to the second part??? I was getting into the story!
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September 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i love this story i have to know what happens next please update soon