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August 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This story is great! I love the latest chapter. Your so good with sex scenes. It was so sweet it made my heart melt. ^_^
Please continue writing this. Please, don't quit. I will be very heartbroken if you quit.
Please continue writing this. Please, don't quit. I will be very heartbroken if you quit.
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January 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It's a good story. The only helpful hints that I can give you is concerning your tenses and verbal phrases. Your grammar has gotten a whole lot better since the first stories I read of yours. I haven't seen any Sailor Moon cartoons/anime in years and years. I saw the first season (maybe not even all of it, I really couldn't honestly say) of Sailor Moon and that was it. Busy chick at the time. LOL Well, you take care. I am so gonna catch up on this when you update it. Keep up the good work.
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September 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey you! I just sent you chapter 3, it's edited and I left you some notes on it. If you need to clarify anything, you know how to reach me! :)
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August 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Such a great story. This is so romantic in my mind and I just can't wait to read the next set of chapters. So PLEASE CONTINUE WRITING MORE!
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April 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
SUCH a great story!! I myself think every one should read this story, they would most likely like/love this story. PLEASE, I hope there would be more to come. ^-^
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January 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting story you have here. It's an interesting crossover and I hope you update soon.
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August 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I hate to leave the first review, especially when it's very critical and might be seen as an attack, and not constructive criticism.
You need a beta reader hon. Your spelling isn't very good. And your sentence structure is bad. I read one paragraph and I couldn't read any more. It sounds very disjointed, as in it's not flowing well. It sounds like you are trying to explain everything at once.
My best advice is to slow down. It sounds like you are writing while very excited. And that's good, but it can garble things up a little. Another piece of advice I have is to re-read everything you write before you post it if you can't find someone you trust to help you as a beta. I'm not offering myself cause I need to get one for my own self, which is why I'm suggesting that you do.
One other thing, this is a interesting crossover idea. Don't get rid of the story because of what I just said. I would love to read this again once things have been fixed.
You need a beta reader hon. Your spelling isn't very good. And your sentence structure is bad. I read one paragraph and I couldn't read any more. It sounds very disjointed, as in it's not flowing well. It sounds like you are trying to explain everything at once.
My best advice is to slow down. It sounds like you are writing while very excited. And that's good, but it can garble things up a little. Another piece of advice I have is to re-read everything you write before you post it if you can't find someone you trust to help you as a beta. I'm not offering myself cause I need to get one for my own self, which is why I'm suggesting that you do.
One other thing, this is a interesting crossover idea. Don't get rid of the story because of what I just said. I would love to read this again once things have been fixed.