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June 14, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Nice little one-short
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December 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
love it!
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November 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very, very intense! I wish you could write a sequel to this. Or another Sess and Sango. Written very well. Good job!
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August 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Adored it. Absolutely adored it. Being the English Nazi, I noticed a few errors, but that's about it. You portray both characters very well and the scene just fits. I can't wait to hear more. =D
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August 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Pay attention to if you use the a verb twice in the same sentence.
If you wanted to seem more poetic, which some people do, then try not to use words like "them" or "her" a lot in one paragraph or sentence;
"He remained constantly inside of -her-, with his hips still jerking upwards into -her-."
Thats all. 8D
/Karin/
If you wanted to seem more poetic, which some people do, then try not to use words like "them" or "her" a lot in one paragraph or sentence;
"He remained constantly inside of -her-, with his hips still jerking upwards into -her-."
Thats all. 8D
/Karin/
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August 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've already read this once before, but ... *Grin.* Still always gets me just a little revved.
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August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yes. Well. xD This is... very... Wow. There were a few typographical errors, but nothing too horrible. Lovely fanfiction, though. I'm not particularly a fan of the SangoxSesshoumaru ship, but this impressed me. Could be because I was linked directly to it. xD But yes. Amazing fanfiction. Do create more~. -Aruite.
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I loved it! Especially because it is an odd pairing. I think your writing is great and keep me up to date when you do another story.
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March 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Eyah! A great twist between two characters I could actually see coming together. Wonderful description and mouthwatering sex. Better write more eh? Maybe start from the beginning of when they met ne? I look forward to seeing more <3 Chihachan <3
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January 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
First of all, I'd like to say that has to be one of the best one-shot scenes I have read in a long while. The detail was just enough so that my mind could see it clearly, and yet I wasn't bogged down by all the extra words.
Secondly, I believe you captured both Sesshoumaru's and Sango's personalities flawlessly. Sesshoumaru, I knew, you'd have no problem with anyway, but just being able to make Sango enough like the actual Sango was enough to impress me.
[And I do agree with your statement that Sango is inwardly wanting someone to dominate her and to give her the supportive figure to "lean on", thus lightening the weight of her always having to be the strong one.]
Besides that, there's not much else I can say besides bravo.
That and...
You better let me read your other fanfics if and when you write another.
Secondly, I believe you captured both Sesshoumaru's and Sango's personalities flawlessly. Sesshoumaru, I knew, you'd have no problem with anyway, but just being able to make Sango enough like the actual Sango was enough to impress me.
[And I do agree with your statement that Sango is inwardly wanting someone to dominate her and to give her the supportive figure to "lean on", thus lightening the weight of her always having to be the strong one.]
Besides that, there's not much else I can say besides bravo.
That and...
You better let me read your other fanfics if and when you write another.