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December 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Please finish this good story.
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August 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE AS SOON AS YOU POSSIBLY CAN PRETTY PLEASE?!!??!?!?!?!?!?!?
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November 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was good...more please X3
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August 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
HOT!!!
Please update soon.
^__^
Please update soon.
^__^
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August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
looking forward too see what the sun brings with it when it rises.
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OooOoo!! New Moon! Ahh!! (freaking tease!!) T_T Alas, the smut is JUST out of my REACH! TToTT Good job! ^_^
-DM
-DM
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter!!!!!!!!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You tease! Please update soon. I must have more smut! ^_~
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Update soon please gotta know whats going to happen! Keh I said please!
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mmm. (melts)
Okay well onto the review/critique.
I think your story could use some betaing/editing before posting, because some sentences just fall off at certain points, and others don't make sense at all (it causes the reader to stop and go 'huh?' which really affects the flow of the story). And! *cough* there should be more smut. *cough* XD Make it longer! Wahhh!
Good job!!
-DM
Okay well onto the review/critique.
I think your story could use some betaing/editing before posting, because some sentences just fall off at certain points, and others don't make sense at all (it causes the reader to stop and go 'huh?' which really affects the flow of the story). And! *cough* there should be more smut. *cough* XD Make it longer! Wahhh!
Good job!!
-DM