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September 23, 2019 at 12:00 AM
Please update
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July 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
this was amazing. i can not wait for more to come. please let there be more. keep up the good work and writing
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February 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Not having a beta is not an excuse. Your mistakes are very elementry. If you are old engough to post on this site and English is your native language than you don't have a reason for most of those errors. However, I find the story line itself to be interesting. I've not come across the idea of blending mating season with another plot device before. I hope you edit your chapter and then continue.
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September 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh come on, you can't leave it at a cliff hanger!! That is so not fair, but you are the author .....but I hope you updat soon!!! Please!!!
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September 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
-shudders-
I didn't get past the first few sentences without blanching. ><
You really need to try typing out in full sentences before putting up your story. ;_;
Other than that, try looking through your grammar more thoroughly.
It should become a habit.
That is the heart of a good writer.
w/♥
.:D:.
I didn't get past the first few sentences without blanching. ><
You really need to try typing out in full sentences before putting up your story. ;_;
Other than that, try looking through your grammar more thoroughly.
It should become a habit.
That is the heart of a good writer.
w/♥
.:D:.
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September 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Continue soon your seems really good,so far.
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September 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
the plot seams really interesting but this is damn near impossible to read u need to get someone to beta it b4 u post it the maybe ppl will actually b able to read it and understand it sorry
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August 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I do like your story so far, and as other reviewers have pointed out, you need to check your spelling
and grammar. Other than that it is good.
and grammar. Other than that it is good.
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August 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great first chapter very interesting look forward to more
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July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
uuh, don't want to sound rude, but i think you need to check your grammer before you put your story up, you have many grammer and spelling mistakes to the point your story don't make much sense.