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December 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
honey aword opf caution never and i really mean never leave a cliff hange rlike that ok it could get you kile despacially with such a greats tory liek this one but honestly love ths tory please hurry and make more and send e the lingk when you made another chapter my email is normamourani@yahoo.com
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November 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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November 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story has such great potential. You seem to have a lot of good ideas. However, that having been said, the grammatical errors were so prominent that they nearly took my attention away from the story. My advice would be to get a beta reader, or to at least type out the stories in Microsoft Word (or some type of spellcheck+grammarcheck program) before you upload them. I look forward to seeing future chapters :P :)
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November 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very erotic.....nice I like!
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July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
now that is sweet one shot i really like the story hope u make another one or a short story with lemons
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July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The idea and the raw content are good, solid. However, the grammar is shaky at best, I'm assuming you're either ESL (English as a Second Language) or just a "young" writer. I suggest using a beta-reader to help with this little bump in the road. Keep writing.
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July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your wording really isn't the best. The grammer is a little shaky.
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that was hot! So, is there gonna be a sequel? ^_^