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this is the 1st time iv seen kags w/ sephy. they actually make a pretty cute couple. fluffy could use a lesson on how 2 treat ppl. hes a grade A bastard in ur story. but i guess its intentional. is jareth the guy played by bowie? cause thats the only goblen king i can think of. please update soon.

I'm still waiting for more chapters. Check your e-mail.

Wow!! Just.. Wow!!! I love Alana, she's got a great character. And the scene where Jareth wound up in Sephiroth's dream was hilarious!! The story's flowing great, and I can't wait to see what happens next. And you say that my reviews are what are keeping you writing? I'm stunned, because the way this story goes, it looks to be simply overflowing with ionspiration and creativity. But keep writing, and I'll keep reading, reviewing, and most of all, ENJOYING!!!!

OK, first, I love the latest chapter. The way you described Alana's character, and the history of her bloodline and the sirens was wonderful. Well written (didn't sound at all like an excerpt from an encyclopedia) and very imaginative. And I could just see the look in Jareth's eyes when he relized that she was exactly who he was afraid to hope she'd be. I really can't wait for the next chapter, when (I'm sure) she's going to tell him that he's her true mate. I'm so looking forward to that. And nothing about that is going to be rushed because they already have an established intimate history.

And second, yes, the scene with Sephiroth and Kagome flows much better now. The setup is much better, and her reasoning as well as his reaction to her opening words are much more believable. All together, the scene has much more substance now, and Sephiroth has a reson to be listening to her story without interrupting her. When I read through the chapter again, the flow was so even and smooth that I had to go back and reread it to find what you altered. I got so wrapped up in the story that I forgot that it had ever been different. Altogether, this was a wonderful update! And I can't wait for the next one!

I just found this story today so sorry that I haven't reviewed before. So far I am really enjoying this story and would love to see you continue rather than delete it. I hope that someone else besides me reviews because I don't think two reviews from the same person would count. Hope I get to read more soon. ^_^ ~C.L.~

Please continue with the story, I like and have just found this very interesting story, it provides the perfect mix of male yummyness.

Yes! I wish you would continue this story, it's really fantastic and I can't wait to read more so I hope you try and update as soon as you can.

update please i love this story.

My computer's been down, so I missed the last update. It's a really great start to a relationship between Sephiroth and kagome, but the part where kagome tells Sephiroth about herself seems a tad rushed. I mean, she just says "I have something to tell you." She doesn't say, "I need to tell you this" or "I hope you believe this" or anything like that to prepare him a little for the incredible story she's about to tell him. She just blurts it out. Even something as simple as "I hope you don't think I'm crazy" would slow it down enough to maintain the flow a little better. I hope this isn't coming accross as a hypercritical nitpick, it's really meant to be a friendly suggestion. This chapter really carries things along nicely, and you've done a spectacular job of setting the scene for the next plot twist. Overall, it's a great chapter, i just think it could be improved a little. Although, either way, it doesn't detract from the quality of the story at all.

Nice next chapter. I hope that Sephiroth will get back his elongated life span somehow.
Yes, there are many Sesshoumaru/Kagome stories out there. Nearly as many as InuYasha/Kagome. I couldn´t say that I am sick of them, but sometimes they get really boring (nearly always the same plot...)
Again... Please update soon!