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July 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story needs to go on its going to drive me crazy not to know what happens afterwards please please please continue
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
you are my goddess *bows deeply*that was awesome?
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy Crap for the love of the fluffy please keep going i so need more TTFN
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
you should continue the story i like it
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was REALLY hott!!!!!!!....*takes a cold shower*...Kagome has all the funn....*Pouts*
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was a good one shot and the only thing that I would change is the first person view. Othe then that it can become a good story, do like a little bit of a before for the first chapter then have it come back to after they fuck. that's what I say you should do. If you do make it a story I would read it.
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey I thought your story was good and all, but I think you need to find a common ground with your story switching back and forth between P.O.V. is good to show all views, but switching back and forth between first and third in the middle of a paragraph is grammaticly incorrect as well as confuseing; so you really need to watched out for that. MK
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You cant end it here. You must continue. You deserve 1000000 wet-willies if you stop here
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think that would have been a really cool beginning to a whole fanfic and I think you should do it. Good luck and if you don't do it then it's very good how it is too.
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You should continue.....Kagome a sex addict lol
P.S....Sex scene good.....great....hot!!
LOL
P.S....Sex scene good.....great....hot!!
LOL