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Wow, I love your story. Finally, one truly inspiring story with Kagome and Sesshomaru. I can't wait to see what will happen next! This story is truly wonderful!

The story was interesting and wonderful. Hm, of course, there is a problem which I don't like and that is female oppression but I understand that the demon's world is different from human's. Not to mention that in reality, considering animals, males are dominant and that is how they world works, the same pattern I can see in this story. Overall, you made a great job. :)

I liked this story. :)

wonderful!!

absolutly loved it is was wonderful, look very forward to ur writings in the future


LADY TY

loved it.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

this was a great story. But the only thing that I found to be left hanging in the air, unexplained, was how Kagome was able to sense Sess if he was masking his scent and aura... I also think that blue and amber eyes would be soo kawaii!!! ^^'

The fact that you can debate every point makes me glad. I disagree with most of your points but won't get into that because I like that an author is willing to fight for their story. The bigger picture is you missed my point though. I'm very very rarley nice about it but i try for constructive critisim rather than out right critisim but with the harshness that the two sometimes get confused.

I was using all thouse points as an example and not commenting on th content of the story like some one track fangirl with a penchant for "...but cannon shows that she'll be with inuyasha..." (personally i prefer AU kagome Sesshoumaru) but your chocie of story line.

Think of your favourite book, did it thow you at times? Get your blood racing as you fought to turn the next page? That is what you lack. I can probebly guess the story line of the story because with the" easy way out" options I listed" you took away all potential PLOT conflict and readers had no other foundation to build a "ok what now situation" create blaise situations.

I am not trying to insult you. I am not trying to get you to change your story. What I am trying to do is say next time you write one sit down and look at it and try not to plan for a "happily ever after" from the first chapter erasing all conflict before it has a chance to give birth to some interesting situations and questioning for your readers.

happy writing
saint

i am so bitterly disappointed. When i read the summary for this story it looked like such an enjoyable one but i started reading and by the end of the second chapter I reufed to bother anymore.

Your writing style is good but how you tackle your story is the problem. You take the easy way out. Stories are about conflict and emotion and you just dropped the bag every time.

She gave up her love for inuyasha...easy road out
He's with Kikyo now...easy road out
Naruku's dead...easy road out
She was strong enough not to show rage at being raped..easy road out
Inuyasha didn't care that she was missing because he got laid and was an asshole...easy road out
Shippo just dissapeared...easy road out
no one heard the fight or the fact that they didn't look for her in the morning...easy road out
she was ONLY angry at inuyasha and walking calmly with THE MAN THAT RAPED HER!!!...easy road out
In the first chapter she listed to every thing he had to say and the whole situation was explained and understoond...easy road out


You have eliminted so much conflict it is unbelievable, dropped the force and weight your story could have had making it into a random piece of fluff that will simple be disregarded tomorrow, have not backed up a SINGLE ONE of your characters emotionally or realistically(thereby failing to give your story any realisim)making your job as the author easy and predictable and completely dropping the ball for your readers.

goodbye and good luck with your writing.

i am the same way now i dont crave it until someone brings it up a lot. good job on the chapter. update soon.