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October 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your story has great potential . . .even though the descriptions (and I don't mean the naughty ones) are a little sparse. You also jump from place to place without much of a lead-in which might also be helpful. All in all, however, I think you could turn this into a decent story. ...maybe even a great one!