rate_review Reviews

Ah! So sweet!

I'm so glad you decided to continue with this story. I found it intresting that Inuyasha should be affected by the incence. I guess I shouldn't just because of his sense of smell. Please write more

Hahaha. I loved that. So funny. I really want to see what happens the next morning. How they react and act around each other.

I am always gentle. You wrote this story great.

Oh goddess i HAVE GOT to get Affie to read this one it's too good... please keep writing and keep up the great work
Rysha

I have to be honest I wasn't even able to make it passed the first few lines. The formatting on this is really bad. Everything runs together, it's really hard on the eyes. I'd suggest going back and spacing things out. Like giving dialogue its own line and separating things into different paragraphs. Take a quick look at a few of the other stories on AFFnet, you'll see that a lot if not all of the ones with better spacing get more reads and reviews. The summary looks so promising, I'd like to come back when its spaced better and give it another try. Good luck with you writing!

ah yes! so much better!

hats off to humor!

ginny

There ya go.

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You should continue this one o and what kind of incence was it??? kudos!!!

i think that is a thing all men do... disgusting pigs!!

that was really funny!

suggestion: put an extra space between paragraphs so it's easier to read. a line or something else between scene changes ~~~~~~~~~~~~ it makes it so much prettier!

thank you,
ginny