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Sounds promising! I can't wait to see more!! :)

Mm piercings...my fetish... Ok OK Besides that this is a really good start to this story and I can tell it's going to hold my attention till the end! As for a bit of advice please please don't take this wrong!! Buuuuttt you could stand to space out your lines a bit more, each time someone speaks make that a different line so it's a bit easier to understand.

Other than that GREAT JOB!!!

Thanks :D i will and i'm pretty bored so i think i 'm gonna update again..ahaha i'm on a creative streak and this is my first story :D

This is a very interesting story so far, very promising. The piercings are really catching me. Well, a piece of advice for your story. Space out some of the paragraphs. To make it clearer who is speaking, you need to start a new paragraph/line/sentence... whatever. (Don't take this the wrong way or anything. I just don't want to see you get bad reviews just for something like that.)

Other than that, it is still easy to follow. Can't wait to see an update.

Take care.