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See what your writing does to me? I just couldn't sleep for thinking about this. I am completely unnerved by Hiei's threat to break off their relationship because her friend asked for her promise not to say anything about a personal matter they talked about. If anything, HE is totally to blame -- he's the one who brought Yusuke and Keiko into their private life to begin with. And Mistress Hisa telling him he could hand her leash over to another master -- that wouldn't be his decision. Or this other lady's. Not unless Kagome is a "working girl" in this woman's brothel. Kagome approached Hiei. If things don't work out between them, she would be free to seek out someone else as she chooses. And while you told us that Hiei didn't let his uncertainty show, and that he wondered if she would do as he told her, he was really being quite cruel to let her think he would end things. I have also wondered about his thoughts about taking Keiko in hand if Yusuke didn't step up. That's way beyond his little realm of authority. His agreement/relationship is with Kagome. He really has no say in what goes on in anyone else's relationship. He might be annoyed and irritated. He might want to chew them out. But it's not his place to discipline someone else's submissive. It's very obvious how much he cares about Kagome, so I am surprised he jeopardized things by making such an ultimatum. Especially since he made it public in front of company. What would he have done if she hadn't come crying to him? (That part made my stomach clench.) He knew very well about her insecurites, and yet he made that a sticking point in their future. Like I said, he was placing the blame on Keiko, but the truth was, he's the one who brought them in. Kagome said she wanted their relationship to go back to the way it was -- before Yusuke and Keiko became part of it? Because they are now, thanks to Hiei. Somehow, I don't think he thought about the consequences. Maybe he's the one who needs some training in how to be a good, faithful, trustworthy master. Whew! I can't believe your little PWP has me thinking about this so much!!

wow .. im glad hiei helped yusuke train her ...please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

angel

Oh my God, that was insanely hot!!! I have to admit never seeing the series Yu Yu Hakusho, but as a PWP smut fest this rocked my socks. It was a great S&M fic and the anal play was just icing on the cake. LOVED IT.

Oops, I rushed and reviewed before reading the second chapter ^^;;

Second chapter was equally, if not more awesome as the first. You have no idea how I have been dying for some decent Dom/sub fic and you have delivered my friend. The group action, the anal sex.... just kdjlkdjfdkjfdlk YES.

Things seem to keep on heating up and I can't wait to read more.

wow that was hot i love it and im gald she when for it .. please update soon .. later for now

angel

I cannot wait to see where you take this! I am so excited! It is wonderful! I want to see the chapters to come, if there are more, this would be a great fic to continue for a while. It has a lot of potential, but what else should I expect from two great authors!

*snickers* I can't wait to see Keiko's training. That's going to be an adventure and a half there. I'm not sure she should've submitted so easily though. She's always seemed like such a spitfire and to see her yield seems a bit OOC. *grins* Excellent job otherwise!

Such an awesome;y written story, no matter how many time i read I still love! Great job!

wow that was great .. please update soon .. later for now

angel