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Oh, I really like this story! If you ever need someone to Beta for you, just let me know. I'm an English major.

I like what you have written so far, please write more. But, can you make it easier between Kagome and kouga? She has always been so nice to him and now she is being cruel, can't she make it up to him? And why did inuYasha turn demon with his sword on him? I thought he couldnt turn demon as long as he had his sword....Anyway, good plot, write more asap.

Hey, Sweetie. I've read all the chapters, from start to finish (as of yet). And I must say that it's very good.
You said that Kouga was OOC. I'm not so sure about that. Presonally, I think you've got him pretty well pegged for what his character is supposed to be. And I really sympathise with the problem you had with your computer. Mine bugged at least 3 times while writing my 2nd chapter on Eternal Destiny for my friend Inugrrrl. It took me almost a full week before I could get everything out the way I wanted, so I know exactly where you're coming from.

I'm really looking forward to your next chapter. The plot is fantastic. Keep up the good work.

Luv ya & leave ya. JA NE.

i wonder if kouga's right... you said that he's been nearly transforming for a while now, like every morning and i'm assuming every time he was physically close to her... unless he allowed it in order to prove a point with kouga?

but didn't he want to keep the whole relationship a secret from the others... didn't the whole 'youkai posturing' thing defeat the purpose of their secrecy?

exciting chapter.

thank you,
ginny

brava, write more please! i like. m hmm

If you can take the time to proof this story, you have a wonderful fic going here, and it would be great with just a bit of editing. Some of the grammar errors do distract and fixing them would make a world of difference. Your storyline seems to be very well thought out and your presentation is extremely good.

An example of something to look out for as you go, is there are a few places where you mean to say "her" and instead are saying 'he'. Example: "He lips were blue and she was freezing. He heart beat was too slow for his comfort." In this set you are referring to Kagome's lips and heart, so the missing 'r' makes the sentences confusing.

Ohohoh! Scary! I wonder what really would have happend if Koga didn't intervean. Great Job with the fight seen and all. Keep it up!

Looking good. I am really looking forward to the next bit. I want to know about Shippou's reactions. And will Kagome realize that she can't expect InuYasha to behave like a 21st century teen? And what will happen to Naraku?

Yea, haven't seen a good story in a while, thanks so much for your work, and I know it's a lot of work. I can't wait to see how the group reactions to "the confession" :). I also commend you don't give everything in the first chapter. It's nice to see it progressing, and you seem to be going at a good pace, not too fast not to slow. Just one observation. You do have a few spelling errors here and there, you using spell check? I'm not complaining really, it's just an observation. I do think your talented in writing and put together your thoughts well. Keep going, love it!!!

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?