rate_review Reviews

You've rushed the ending a bit too much. I find that it's just not detailed enough. THis story has potetial, though. Try editing and adding some more on. Build up something between Inuyasha and his rival. It doesn't have to be a knock-down drag out fight, but something that both your characters have to prove for themselves and to Kagome. Like my husband says: 'put a little meat on it'. The idea's great, just elaborate. And please, keep on writing.

hm... it's a tad... rushed story telling. I don't know what to think... it intrigues me but, there is something that irritates me about it...

you do have potential though, I only wish it was a bit more detailed and story like.. .it kinda seems like an outline for a story that you are thinking of doing.

anywho, hope to hear some more work from you soon ^_^

Got a good thing going here :) Wanna see more soon. My only suggestion is maaaaybe a beta and I'm open-- in fact it would be a pleasure...

Good JOB!!

Its pretty nice LOL Update!