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for end only to begin again

by chicke222

person niceone
schedule February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
it a great stroy keep it going wish the chapters were a little longer but overall great
person cocoke5
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh right kegoma that the to show those men ha ha the story is getting real good and you writing is real good to and keep up the good work and i will be wait for more of the story and see what happen next to kegoame do she meet her friends . up date soon.
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow ... im glad she was in a good mood ..please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

angel
person Celtic_Angel24
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow I haven't read something as great as this in a long time. I can't wait for the next chapter to come soon.
schedule February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW plaese plaese plaese update i would love to read more Ja NA
person cocoke5
schedule February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow now kagoem is the own land of the east . love it and can not wait for more of the story. your doing real good . more more please ofthe story. up date soon.
schedule February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow .. now she is the new lady of the east .... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

angel

schedule February 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow .. im glad kagome found someone to go with her so she will not be alone ... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

angel
schedule February 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your story is good, but it would really be a lot better if you stayed within one person perspective. You constantly switch between first person perspective and third person, even within the same paragraph. A good beta could help you with this. I have enjoyed what I did read so far though.
person Neptunee
schedule February 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ok you must up date. I want to know more.