rate_review Reviews

Dear author,
Welcome ! And thank you to be here. I don’t think you need so much encouragements seeing the very hot chapter you gave us !!! But an idea maybee : poor Sesshoumaru would have to be punished, Kagome would say she’s afraid he would be too wild and rough because of his too long restraint if he were taking her yet, so she would say as a punition he would have to come before taking her but only with the help of her hand, and this hand would not be totally enough tightly put on his shaft, but he would have to succeed with that…..
Good luck, I wait with delight the new chapter your wonderful brain may give us !!! And please, think to add a chapter at “The Photograph”, I found it so very subtile in “snaking” feelings… (that’s why all people loved it !)…

A french mother and reader, always faithful for you,
Merci beaucoup (thank you very much)

Merely Truth

OMFG!
MORE NOW...PLEASE?!?!
MWUAH!!!

I love this story you have write more it is so hot !!!!!!!! WRITE MORE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

OH! And it was just getting great! PLEASE! continue quickly! I absulutly love this, and am hopeing to use some of your...'ideas' and...'suggestions' on my husband soon...;)
I absulutly love how Sesshy is getting harder and harder almost in every paragraph! It is such a turn on! I had to go and relieve my self once in the middle of a chapter!
Please, Up-date as quickly as you are able to!
TTYL;
megan

Woo hoo! Awesomely hot and unbearably erotic. You definitely have the touch. I love the way that even in his pride at her reaction to him, he acknowledges her control. Kagome is thinking this is a one-time occurence? Or perhaps just a fling? How in the world does she think she could ever settle for a regular man after this? Poor girl!! I can't wait for more!

Heh. Before you start thinking this review is more of a flame than con crit, allow me to say that I never review crapfics. They are not worth the time.
I almost turned back while I was reading the first chapter. You need to re-edit that thing with a hacksaw. It looks terrible and it reads terrible. After that, I was in way way prepared for how good the story got with each successive chapter. I'm sure you've lost readers simply from that first chapter alone.

I think the thing that irked me the most was the Shikon no Miko bit. Rather than going on and on about what happened with the jewel, Naraku, and her lost innocence (which you really didn't expand upon, making it this kinda nebulous sticks-out-like-a-sore-thumb thing.), you should refer to her raised status a bit more, talk about the upheavals it caused in the youkai community there, leading to the thing with Sesshoumaru hunting her. (Gad, longest sentence ever) I saw you had covered that a bit in the sixth chapter.

Aside from that, the smut is fantastic. You drag the tension up to a crescendo and then crash into the sex. You're very good there. There is some serious overuse of the word 'arousal' in a few parts, but I see you really do try to mix it up a bit without using euphemisms (i.e. towering marble pillar of lust).

But as I said, every chapter gets better and better. The bit with Inuyasha still assuming Kagome was purely innocent and had a simple crush on Sesshoumaru? The great deal of double entendre in the chapter where Kagome's asking Sesshoumaru to join them? That was absolute fucking gold. Seriously, if you need a beta though, look no farther. Aside from the first chapter, I enjoyed reading this immensely.

WOWW VERY HOT

**Written as of Chapter 7**

Very interesting...that he, Sesshoumarou, would willingly give himself up to Kagome, is surprising...

As always, your writing style brings every details alive clearly, and the scenes you depict are vivid in my mind. Very nicely done, looking forward to reading the rest.

great story =)

AWESOME....PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!