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December 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i just wanted to say "GREAT JOB" on your story it was interesting though, it was short but cute
to the point i just wanted to tell-- on a part of the story almost at the end when the're in the kitchen well kagome tells inuyasha to "sit" down and he does but he's suppose to fall remember she said the word soooo...he's suppose to fall....i know u might forgot to see that part right there.... just telling you so other people wont keep on telling even though some might have already but neways...good job and keep on writing can wait for another one
to the point i just wanted to tell-- on a part of the story almost at the end when the're in the kitchen well kagome tells inuyasha to "sit" down and he does but he's suppose to fall remember she said the word soooo...he's suppose to fall....i know u might forgot to see that part right there.... just telling you so other people wont keep on telling even though some might have already but neways...good job and keep on writing can wait for another one
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November 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WRITE MORE PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you need to add more to this because you ended it rather abruptly... AND .. you used a cop out ending.
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very cute. :)
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November 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is not an R-rated story. Go post it on Fanfiction.net or something, but it does not belong on AFF where an R-rating or higher is required.
You just piss people off when you post kid stuff on an adult site. It's like false advertising when you say it is an R-rated story but it is only PG at the most.
Other people have been kicked off AFF for posting kiddy shit here and I hope you are too.
You just piss people off when you post kid stuff on an adult site. It's like false advertising when you say it is an R-rated story but it is only PG at the most.
Other people have been kicked off AFF for posting kiddy shit here and I hope you are too.
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November 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
dude? where's the adult part??
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November 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ooooohhhh poor Kagome.
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far,and thanks for telling me about how the second chapter starts similary to the first.
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November 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You used "inu-tachi" incorrectly. It means "Inuyasha gang" not "dog demon" or "inu-youkai" as you probably meant. Don't use the Japanese terms unless you know what they mean.
Your spelling is problematic and the characters are out-of-character, especially Kagome.
Your spelling is problematic and the characters are out-of-character, especially Kagome.
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November 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Presenting the pyscho bitch Kagome lol great story except you uploaded the same chapter twice.