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New Chapter Please!!!!!!!!!!!!1

Here's a review to feed your muse. I hope she has the best room in the dungeon. O_O

The only thing I can think of that's wrong in this chapter is that you keep using women instead of woman. When there's only one, you need to use only the singular form which is woman. :)

Hi it's me again.

I really like your story but you keep spelling Miroku's name wrong. *wince* Sorry! I won't point out the rest of the mistakes since they're minor, but just Miroku's name would do. :)

Now that's better! Miroko makes me think of a girl. :) I really like where this is going.

Kagome's mom's name and Kagome's grandpa's names are never mentioned in the manga or anime. They're just mama and grandpa. If you want to stay true to canon, you could just say Kagome's granpa and Kagome's mom or Mama and grandpa. Kunloon is a name made up by a fanfic author. It's Chinese/Korean in nature, not Japanese.

I skipped the end part of the chapter. I'm guessing Hiei and Kagome mated but I'm not really interested. The sexual tension is nice and all but if the demons can easily kidnap her like they did right under Hiei's nose, shouldn't they all just mate already? Their lives are at stake and if it were me, or even if it were some prude, I think they'd rather give up their virginity than die. It's inevitable anyway and prolonging the inevitable only makes them open targets, sitting ducks. Everything else is moot.

Once they're all mated, who is Kagome going to marry as a human?

I think Shuuichi would be the best choice since it would please his mother, beat away his fangirls and Yusuke doesn't really have a lot of family to explain it to unlike Kurama who has a mom, dad and brother among other things. Hiei is not an option since he already got to mate her first and he's a demon so he doesn't need human marriage.

Finally! The chapters leading up to everyone being mated was torture and I'm glad it's finally done and over with. I felt like it was dragging when they kept skirting around the issue, but I'm happy that they've settled that hurdle now. They can move on to the next. I hope it doesn't take too long though. I can't wait for Shippo to start torturing his new dads and for grandpa to meet his new grandsons. Souta and Mama Higurashi shouldn't be left out too.

I still don't see why Rin turned into a demon slayer and is now somehow immortal, but what they hey. I look forward to the next chapter.

hot hot hot hot HOT!!! looking forward to the next chapter of this awesome story!!

Well it took you awhile but it was worth the wait. Hope you update soon! This story is the best!