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for Bitten

by theamazingshoe

person Anon
schedule December 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Anon
schedule April 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Shaid
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
interesting so far. I'm looking forward to more. The tone is really great and the plot seems good.
person szaugglaughs
schedule October 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
well, it's definitely got me curious! oh, one possible grammar oopsie, first chapter, near the end. 'definably wrong.' Is it supposed to be that, or was it supposed to be 'definitely wrong' ? Just checkin'! Anyway, I'll be keeping an eye out for the next chapter!
schedule October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
characterization of kagome spot on! he just saved her but she's naked so she sits him...

great story... can't wait to read more!

thank you,
ginny
person XxSangoxX
schedule October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you use the wrong form of threw.. it's threw not through.
person Neo-Crystal
schedule October 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW!.....That was awesome!!! PLEASE HURRY with the next chapter!
person Diane
schedule October 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked it & am looking forward to the next chapter to find out what's going on in the bathroom. As far as mistakes go I only really noticed this 1 near the end of the chapter & it's really common; Something was defiantly wrong. Defiantly should be definitely. Defiant is like I'm not gonna do it & you can't make me & definite is you're sure of something. A little simplistic but I hope it gets the point across. Hope this helps.
person Anon
schedule October 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow do finish
person Metsuki-baba
schedule October 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very well done!! I am anxiously awaiting your next update!