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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Update soon please!
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October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
that was nice you should put up gravitation songs like sleepless beauty that song rocks!!!
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October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
keep going it's great so far. keep up the good work. what the heck is a beta reader? lol. talk to ya laters. bye bye ^_^
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October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW I LIKE THIS STORY A WHOLE LOT. I HOPE YOU CONTINUE IT AND UPDATE SOON. WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO DO A LOVE SONG WITH SESS AND KAG??? I WANNA SEE THAT ONE PLEASE. LOL.
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October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow cool right on but one problem to short comine all thesse chapter if you want other than that coolness ^-~.
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October 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you should separate or italics the song lyrics, as it is right now, it makes the story choppy and unpleasant to look at. Try to do more than oneliners, its hard to put things together, like the 11yr old bleeding part... rape? First period? (the latter was my guess)
I don't mean to be overly critical but I think you have a begining of a great idea and it would a shame to waste it.
I don't mean to be overly critical but I think you have a begining of a great idea and it would a shame to waste it.
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October 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it. So keep going. Update soon too lol. I don't usually like the whole songs in the stories, but at least you picked to do it with two of my fav songs. So I'm liking it. One thing though... some of your sentences just cut off, so make sure you catch that next time. And you might wanna fix that too in these chapters. Other than that it's cool. I hope you continue it.