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You're back! Yay! Sorry about your relationship issues, though. And moving! Gah! I hate moving. I've done it four times and fear that I shall be moving yet again. You have my sympathies. Thanks for posting the half chapter with all you have going on in your life. I loved the first part where Naraku realized that Kagome hated him for the things he said, and that he had to make up with her. And that Lemon was so hot! *Blushes* Tentacal porn is one of my secret Naraku kinks. There just isn't enough of it out there, so thanks for that. *Blushes again*

You did a great job editing this chapter fragment. True, I read it very quickly, but it read smoothly and no errors jumped out at me. My only problem with this chapter is that the two sections seemed rather disccnnected. To go from the emotionally exhausted, wreck of a girl Kagome was in previous chapters to finding her eagerly sucking the cock of the man she believes has used and betrayed her in the worst way is both abrupt and jarring. Hot, but jarring. It seems that it would flow better if there was some sort of transition, how ever brief, to explain why she is doing what she is doing without qualms. After all, great sex is not going to solve the problem of her thinking he is using her. If anything it will make her hate herself more when they are done for having allowed him to use her again. Or maybe you are going for that kind of emotional turmoil. I don't know, but I would really like to. Consider it a complement that you have me overanalyzing the details.


In any case, you take your time and do what you have to do in your own life. Just please don't forget that you have readers waiting with baited breath!

i'm a major nar/kag freak! love the pairing so much! your story is very nice, keep up good work and update soon:)

I love this story can you update soon, i don't know if you have lately, but i would really appreciate it. I love the stories with either sesshoumaru or naraku with kagome.

Another amazing chapter - beautiful and sad. Naraku and Kagome have a lot of issues to work out, don't they? InuYasha has sure made a nuisance of himself, destroying the well like that. I must say, though, that I am glad that is all he did. For a moment there you had me worried that he was going to hurt her family!

Keep up the good work!

Ack, the well! x.x Well, good call, that was probably the worst thing Inu Yasha could do to get back at her. Can't wait for more updates. ^.^

Ah, poor InuYasha. He's not too happy now that the shoe is on the other foot, is he?

I agree a lot with what Kinoko said about this chapter. It is a great chapter, but it's obvious that you posted it quickly without proofing it. Now, I love authors who update quickly, and I managed to get through it with out getting caught up on mistakes, but I would have been cool waiting a little longer for a proof read version. Don't let your adoring readers rush you into posting something that you are not sure is the best you can do. You are a great writer and deserve to have your best work displayed.

That said, I eagerly await another delicious chapter!

Wow. That was way cool! I hope you update soon. I think that Inuyasha finally got his comeuppance but it would be interesting to see if sess is jealous cause he seemd so.

-Dani.

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who cares about grammar? Just post as soon as possible.

Muah ha hahahaha! What did I say!? Pay back is a f-ing bitch InuYasha! Man that sounds bad, but I'm glad InuYasha finally got a taste of his own shit. This chapter seemed rushed though, more mistakes than usual... I understand a couple here and there, however this one was so full of them that I had to re-read alot of it to understand. Take your time with the next chapter and read it out loud before posting it, it would definatly help illiminate alot of the common errors like "she" where it's supposted to be a "he" and other stuff like that. Good work, kinoko

*Grins*...thanks for the steamy lemon! I was wondering when Kags and Naru-chan were gonna get it on. And yes, you must include more, many more wonderful lemons in this fic!

I really love this story, it's very good!