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for Lost Hopes

by miyu557

person Leeana69
schedule November 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lets get some Kagome bashing in here already. Bring the pain. >:D
person inusessybaby
schedule June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I can't believe Kogame!
person 1127
schedule May 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just loved your story !!! It was everything that one should be. I hope that you have time to write more. You really do have a way with words. Thanks !!!
person Imp
schedule October 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow what a great idea for a story. Now, let's go back and edit,
revamp and republish it. You supposedly had a beta for some
parts? I can't believe that, or were they just there for the
title? You could have used Word and gotten a better job done.

I have to say that was a waaaay AU Kagome. InuYasha was a
little more angsty than I've ever seen him, though somewhat
believable. Kouga was okay, though he did get a little
out of hand occasionally. All in all, I'd say find a
genuine beta to review the story with you, SPEALLCHECK
and GRAMMARWISE to the extreme and then publish ist again,
maybe in smaller chapters.

Again it was an excellent idea for a story, just you
REALLY need to clean it up.

IMP
schedule October 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You are a master of storytelling!! This should be made into a movie! I will be looking for more stories from you, Thank you for ending on a happy note.
person ravensfrost
schedule October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
a few chapters could have used a double check as they have a few minor errors but I personally am not all that bothered my that so istead I'd like to thank you for a wonderful, full and beautiful story.
schedule September 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love your work! And I can't wait to read more! Keep up the good work!

Ja!
person kai
schedule September 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
awww...it's over!! so sad!! ;_;
alls well that ends well!! XDDDD
great job, i loved every minute of it!
and the fact that i was in was awesome!! YAY!!!

look forward to whatever you write next!

~kai
schedule August 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
love it!! what about inuyasha's brother??
person Takaouto
schedule August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi! I just reached chapter seven, and I was wondering how your writing style changed so dramatically - by that I mean correct tenses and simple grammar - then I came to realise [it was quite obvious] that you had failed to delete the notes that someone had written in when checking your work.

As of yet, you have not hailed a beta, nor given them any credit, so I am wondering why you are supposedly writing notes, and referring to yourself in third person. Also, why does this other you seem to know things that you don't? [Like kits are young foxes and pups are young dogs].