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This kills me. This is a really good story but it just ends here and I'm dying to know what happens next. How can I find out if this story has been continued or completed on another site???? I'm dying to know what is going on with Midoriko and who the person in the mirror is that wants Kagome and everyone dead. This is such an interesting and exciting story and for it to be just left like this is extremely depressing. Please if anyone knows if this story has been posted on another site with the chapters that follow the ones on this site....please make a note or send out an alert of some kind
.. as an enormous fan of this story I will be ever so grateful.

very good story!!! please continue!!!!

i'm writing this review b/c i don't know if my other one was submitted or not. wow. interesting chapter. a lot of things going on at once. how could you just leave kagome like that though. in the last chapter she was in pain and in this one she still is. we still don't know what's happening. are the screams hurting her, warning her? i gotta know. keep writing. can't wait to see what happens next. update soon.

I stopped reading at the part where she was rambling to herself about "the ways of love making" and how "this could be a wonderful dream!"
>.< Sorry but that was the epitome of lame right there. Little word of advice, try not to have the characters babble on and on about how they have always
dreamed about this guy screwing them. Normal girls don't really think about that when a half naked hot guy is standing in front of them.
Normally what their thinking is "Oh crap...Erm ok im going to sneak away while his eyes are changing from blood red to amber." *Tip toes away* "Ahhhh!"
Something like that would have been a bit more realistic lol. But yeah, I applaud you for writing something.

i just wanted to say that i love your story and the way you write it. i thnk you should continue to do so. if you came out and told us everything the story would not be worth reading. i like piecing the clues together. can't wait for the next chapter. update soon.

I am not a weak reader, I follow story lines quite smoothly and catch on to ideas quite quickly and yet even I have found myself staring incredulously at the screen and saying to myself, "But you are creating conflict with what you have stated in previous chapters." Now since your reviewers and betas have both said on occasion that you are not being clear, perhaps you should just except that you are not being clear and get over yourself. :\ I understand how it is easy to overlook things when you are writing your stories. You get into the funk of things and everything you are thinking seems to be right, but sometimes your fingers do not always listen to what your mind is telling them and a glitch appears which results in unclear story lines. I myself upon rereading some of my previous chapters have sat back going, "What the hell was I thinking?" Or "That is not what I heard in my head or read with my eyes as I was typing it" and yet who else would have submitted my story for me? haha. It happens to the best of us, after all, no else truly understands us as we do. No one else can perceive what exactly it is we sometimes intend. Miscommunication happens all the time. No biggie. We are not after telepathic. :)

when i start to read this story i can not wait for you to up date the story and now that you have i can lever review for you and i like to story very much and can not wait for more up date soon. the story is real good .

your character switching and points of view are not confusing at all, but they are redundant. Other than that this is a great story. Keep it up!

wow! that was intense. a lot going on in this chapter. what a cliff hanger too. can't wait to see what happens next. keep writing. update soon.

That was a great chapter except for the fact that in the first chapter you already said that Naraku was defeated and it was by Kagome herself. It was one of her more redeeming "I have chosen such a strong and loyal mate" qualities. Please be more specific in that it was only a battle and not the ending to Naraku.