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awwww that was fucking awesome i am sporting a raging hardon on now my girl friend acted as we read write more I am begging you!

I love the story. Happy B-Day to you too since my b-day is also in September.

Please you must write more, I have never been more excited to wait for an update. Plus this story is keeping me on my toes, I hope you keep up the job well done. Also this story sounds fantastic, so PLEASE UPDATE as SOON as you can.

OOOOOhhhhhhhh.. I loved this chapter.. The Banana sence cracked me up... Good writting.. Can't wait for the next chapter.. I like to see what her reward is too.. Hurry and update PLZ... This is a great story so far...
Mari

update please, this is very intersting and I wanna see how far it will go. Keep up the good work.


Dawna Sama

Ugh! Clifies! I love to use them, but not be on the recieveing end. *sigh* oh well. Please update soon. I want to see what he has her do, and what her "reward" is.

Hello. I like the first chapter. There are a few spelling "oops's", but other than that, this is a good base to the start of your story. I can't wait to find out where else she has to go. and what is waiting for her at the end. I can't believe that I am going to say this, but, try to draw the story out. Make it interesting, imaginative and fun, but remember, you set the time as for that day, so it can't be too many things.

I know, I sound like I am lecturing. Sorry. I just really wish to see you bring out all you can into your story. And if you don't like my suggestions, don't follow them. Or if you do like them, by all means use them if you like.

*sigh* Lecturing again. I'm sorry, again. I'll shut up now, and let you get back to doing what you were doing.

I can't wait for your next chapter. Could you Email me when you update? Later.

PLEASE write more!!!!!! this story sounds really awesome.

Oh my that was a cool first chapter... I loved it, I can't wait to read more, you gotta update and soon. Loved
the plot sexy and mind blowing... Update soon

hurry and update i would like to know
what will happen