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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was hot, like, uber well done. Sess' dialogue was very believable. And to be honest, I don't care why he was doing what he was doing it made for an awesome fic.
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September 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this was a damn hot story...I love how you have InuYasha insecure and still a virgin and SesshoMaru acting nice, yet...also himself...:D I love the personalities you gave them, different from the anime, yet exactly like the anime...if that makes sense :P Make a second chapter? ::puppy dog eyes:: Pwease?
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September 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The scene with Sesshoumaru on his back, teasing his own body, was very erotic. Inuyasha’s reactions were quite amusing. It gives the impression that he is truly innocent.
This was quite amusing: “the hanyou wasn’t exactly sure if Sesshoumaru was born naked, with fur, or--as he sometimes suspected--in full battle gear.” Humor, injected correctly, can provide fresh air in areas that are thick with passion, anger, angst, etc. I’m impressed.
“I find myself in need of company,” That line was incredibly elegant, exactly the manner in which I would expect Sesshoumaru to address a young, innocent adult. We all know that he is a bit less formal with Rin and sometimes with Inuyasha. But with this one phrase, you have managed to make his formality gentle. Beautiful.
“I ask you to stay,” the youkai continued, “but I won’t force you.” This line gives the impression of contentment in whatever circumstance that Sesshoumaru is left to endure. It was also a way to communicate to us that he doesn’t intend to be threatening in any way. A wonderful change from the norm.
Oh, the seduction! Sesshoumaru is being so gentle. It’s truly amazing. The painstaking detail in your description makes it so real; as though it is a movie playing in the mind. That is the best compliment that I believe that I will ever give an author. You’ve done it.
Gah! I’m melting in my chair! Someone bring a firehose!
The ending was great. “Perhaps another time,”. An answer to both the question of whether or not Sesshoumaru was going to try to kill him again or have sex with him again was just great because it wasn’t an answer at all. I know that there is a word for it, but it is late and my brain is mush. Ambiguous?
Wonderful fic! And another one that could have another little interlude tacked on. You do it so well; otherwise, I wouldn’t bother mentioning that. There doesn’t even need to be a precursor. Just a thought.
Snow
This was quite amusing: “the hanyou wasn’t exactly sure if Sesshoumaru was born naked, with fur, or--as he sometimes suspected--in full battle gear.” Humor, injected correctly, can provide fresh air in areas that are thick with passion, anger, angst, etc. I’m impressed.
“I find myself in need of company,” That line was incredibly elegant, exactly the manner in which I would expect Sesshoumaru to address a young, innocent adult. We all know that he is a bit less formal with Rin and sometimes with Inuyasha. But with this one phrase, you have managed to make his formality gentle. Beautiful.
“I ask you to stay,” the youkai continued, “but I won’t force you.” This line gives the impression of contentment in whatever circumstance that Sesshoumaru is left to endure. It was also a way to communicate to us that he doesn’t intend to be threatening in any way. A wonderful change from the norm.
Oh, the seduction! Sesshoumaru is being so gentle. It’s truly amazing. The painstaking detail in your description makes it so real; as though it is a movie playing in the mind. That is the best compliment that I believe that I will ever give an author. You’ve done it.
Gah! I’m melting in my chair! Someone bring a firehose!
The ending was great. “Perhaps another time,”. An answer to both the question of whether or not Sesshoumaru was going to try to kill him again or have sex with him again was just great because it wasn’t an answer at all. I know that there is a word for it, but it is late and my brain is mush. Ambiguous?
Wonderful fic! And another one that could have another little interlude tacked on. You do it so well; otherwise, I wouldn’t bother mentioning that. There doesn’t even need to be a precursor. Just a thought.
Snow
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September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
your story was pretty sexy i liked it u shud write a contiousation-cant spell)...any wayz wow! o-0
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September 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow!!! that is some fucking awesome shit! I love it to death! I'd like to see like a longer story with more chapters with a Sess/inu pair :D that would be so hot!
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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not bad! It could use a beta I think, but you definitley have a good little smutlet here!
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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
could be mating season is begining and inuyasha hasn't had his first heat yet.
anyho i love the story keep writing
anyho i love the story keep writing
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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'll say this much, despite whatever it was that inspired you to write this..it had a
different type of feel to it.
The description of the sexual encounter [it wasn't lovemaking] gave me the impression
that you write from experience :-) OR you did your homework. Because basically what
I've been reading so far, the sexual acts are starting to sound the same.
You, so far, added a slight flavor to their many numerous [..and written about..]
sexual encounters and I haven't seen something like this in a while.
DO you think you can continue something like this?
different type of feel to it.
The description of the sexual encounter [it wasn't lovemaking] gave me the impression
that you write from experience :-) OR you did your homework. Because basically what
I've been reading so far, the sexual acts are starting to sound the same.
You, so far, added a slight flavor to their many numerous [..and written about..]
sexual encounters and I haven't seen something like this in a while.
DO you think you can continue something like this?
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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...0_o oh my god that was hawt...haha,
it was awesome, keep it up, I want more =]
it was awesome, keep it up, I want more =]