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Tite Hotel romance

How dare you stop it right there i was just getting excited

I didn't think it would be interesting with Kagome being a cleaning lady, but hell you surprised me. Oh, how I wish I was Kagome's shoes (sighs). Just a few suggestions: when Kagome's thinking to herself and you're using the quotes to represent it, try using 'I' instead of the third person of 'she/her' (she is thinking these things to herself, ao obviously she would refer to herself as 'I'); maybe describe more of their thoughts on what they're thinking of something in general or of the other person; maybe a better description of the surroundings to give the reader a better visualization; and try not to use words or phrases repeatedly (ex: ground against, grind against, growled, and groaned). It's not a knock on your writing, because you are doing a good job, but some suggestions to help make you an even better writer. (It's up to you to decide to use them or not, and I'm not making you.)

Some ideas of a title:
1- Pleased to Serve... in Every Way
2- Cleansing Acts (as in Kagome needing to rid herself thinking of that bum)
3- Room Serviced (if you know what I mean; hell, I wouldn't want some other skank to get their hands on him when I am
all ready 'serving' the guest)

Hope it helps in any way. Keep up the good work and update soon since you left that 'evil' cliffie.

*stands tapping her paw* COME ON STOP WITH THE CLIFFIES!!!!!!!!!!

I am waiting and will still stand here tapping until you update. I love this story and love how you are writing it. Please continue ASAP

btw I am the one who sent Solaris here for you. She loves Sesshoumaru also.

Rhonda

oh that was so wrong! write more soon!

umm i wouldn't know a title for this but it is really good

*Laughs* WOW! That was fantastic. Omg Sesshoumaru cracks me up. Seriously, he is such a sex machine *sighs* but he is our sex machine.

Anyway, thanks for the update on your story. And thanks for reviewing my story. You seem to be the only one enjoying it so far. Love the story, please keep it coming I can’t wait to see what happens.

*Growls* you are truly evil. NO MORE CLIFFYS. Please *puppy dog eyes*

OMG U ebil person!!! U must Update ASAP!!!!

Hey great fic update soon please ^_^ !!