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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Love the idea the idea for the story. Love the movie too. Wish I had it.
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August 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG The Swan Princess was my FAVORITE movie when I was little.. I have all three movies :) Ok you must be stupid if you dont know what that smell is.. seriously.. OK but is Inuyasha attracted by it.. kind of like her heat in a way.. or is her heat a week before her period?
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August 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OKay im reviewing again cause well i LUV DIS STORY update soon
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August 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The story is well put together and I hope you're able to update soon.
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August 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The prologe was quite well, especially since you're a beginner. When I was in the same stage, my writings were full of spelling errors. I can't find a single one here. Your style and your idea was also good though, these two things usually develop over time.
I really had only one problem, try not to put an A/N every five words. If someone can't get lost in a story they'll eventually get bored and give up. In my case two chapters top before I move on to something else. If you have something to tell do it before or after the main body of the writing.
Well then that's all. G'night
I really had only one problem, try not to put an A/N every five words. If someone can't get lost in a story they'll eventually get bored and give up. In my case two chapters top before I move on to something else. If you have something to tell do it before or after the main body of the writing.
Well then that's all. G'night
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August 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LU IT LUV IT LUV IT awesome now i hope u wont forget to update cause ill be checking in everyday LUV IT AGAIn
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August 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, just wanted to let you know that you have a good plot but could go more into describing and perhaps not put your A/N in the middle of the story and maybe save it until the end of the chapter? This is a good story but I just needed to let you know about a few concerns I had/have... anyways keep this thing going! p.s. If you need anything just ask... inuyasha_1234@hotmail.com... kay? Ja ne
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August 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi there. I just read your prologue and it looks like a very interesting story so far. There are a couple punctuation and capatilation errors you might want to fix to make the story a little easier to read...I'm a little weird because when I see grammatical errors I can't help but start to look for more and then I can't enjoy the story as much. I hope you don't thing I sound condesending because I do like your story so far. And just so you know Inuyasha's mother's name is/was Izayoi. Please write more,
Liana
Liana