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oh goodie!!! i was so excited last night when i saw you'd posted more chapters that i sat up until 3 am reading them! i thought they were terrific, though too short. then i went back to re-read them this afternoon, saw you'd re-written them and they are EVEN BETTER!!!! i love your story, it has a strong plot, good characterizations and the sex is hot too! seriously, you are a good storyteller. and proof of that was how i wanted to kick Shiori's butt for getting Kagome drunk; friends just don't do that to friends. she put Kagome in terrible danger...oops! there i go again, it IS just a story.

the only criticism i have is purely technical, the tenses of your verbs are often incorrect: using present tense instead of past tense or future tense. or using the wrong word, it sounds like the word you want but it means something totally different. [like the time a friend was beating himself up over a stupid grade and i told him not to castrate himself over it when i meant to say castigate. too embarrassing. yeah, my buds forgot that real quick.] it's a very common error; i know, i spent a semester as a TA in freshman english. besides, writing is NOT easy. i used to write a lot, but writer's block has to be the most painful experience...it totally sucks! And it takes time. it gets even harder when you try to have a life. Well, i've gone on too long. i just wanted to let you know how really good your work is and how much i am enjoying it. please please please give us more...

OMG!!!... update ASAP!..damn you ...leaving huge cliffies!..gar

Really great job...I absolutely love it

Holy Shit! How can you leave us hanging with a cliffie like that?

You may not like the chapter but DAMN was it great!

Okay tell your inner muse or creative spark to get off their
butt and help you update with a NEW chapter!

In case you couldn't tell I LOVED IT! I LOVED IT! I LOVED IT!

Ja Ne!

Wow. nice. Very nice. All I have to say about it. If I say anything else, I'll lose my train of thought and I'll never get my newest yaoi written.

I love this story soooo much. Please, please, please don't leave us hanging for too long....

**Written as of Chapter 9**

Been a while since I read this fanfic. I definitely like it and look forward to seeing the rest.

Kinda curious where you're heading with it though.

great story can not wait for another update!

Hey there you wonderful Authoress,
I wanted to do the happy dance (not a pretty site I assure you) when I saw that the next chapter was up. You didn't let me down! I can see why you seemed worried about this chapter, it seemed a bit, I guess, choppy and rushed.
I'll have to re-read it, but I didn't catch the part where Kagome realized that Sesshy was her Mysterious Demon. All your other chapters flowed wonderfully. Don't worry about it too much, your Muse will come around and all will be smooth again, and you can always go back and edit the chapter whe you get an idea on how to improve it in your eyes! Heck, I'll still be looking for your work and reading, reading, reading! You've got one of the few stories out there that don't suck in my opinion...and I'm VERY PICKY!

I'll be patiently (or not patiently) waiting for the next chapter!!!

Wow!!! This story had me sucked in so quickly I couldn't put it down until I got to the last chapter and mentally screamed " what!!! that's it? no more". You're good. Really good. Writer's block...being sick...etc. One wouldn't have known the way this story is going. If this is what you write when you're having these problems, I'd love to see what you put out when you're totally into the script. Really mind blowing,entertaining stuff here. I'll be looking forward to the rest of this masterpiece!!! And you say you're just 20, huh? Welcome to adulthood, though, from your writing you know quite a bit already. You've certainly quilled my overactive imagination. {but only temporarily, as I NEED the rest of this fic}