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Interesting. Update soon. Can't wait to read why Sesshomaru needs to make Kagome his before the next moon.

loved it

loved it

Start of a good story, however, it is kind of bland!! You need to put some emotion in this story!! I mean do you honestly think that a wife could walk in on her husband sleeping with another woman and becaome instant friends with her and knowing this woman still works for her husband. Never, it just wouldn't happen! And what woman would freely offer her child to a man that just he left her for his career! The story has to be believiable and it's not quiet right in some areas! But if you like it, I like it!

Trust me, the reviews will always come in slowly. I like your story, it's well written. May I suggest getting a beta? They could edit your work before you post it. Just to tweak it here and there. I'm talking about the little things. Just make sure to ask them not to change your story. They can give you all the criticism you want. Reason I brought it up is because I found quite a few grammer errors throughout all three chapters. Not trying to be mean or anything, just making a suggestion. Anyways, keep it up, I really like it.

~Much Love~

Faerie Demoness

it grat dont chang it at all please keep it up

aweee that is so cute daddys little girl its a good story keep it up I'm looking d=foward to your next chapyer

i love it
I cant wait to see Sesshy running with his tail between his legs, (Love the Lord Sesshoumaru) Not many people can take such a serious being and my him fun loving and still keep his face. Love the flour fight. I was little surprised Kagoma wasnt fighting against him, because he did break her heart did he? Ohwell not my story Still think its awsome keep up the great work. I cant wait to read the next chapter I beet i will be ROFLMFAO!

Dude...seriously...She let him off WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY too easily. If that was me, there'd be no way that I'd let him just sweep back into my life like nothing happened. I think that'd be true of most women. At the very least, I'd let him sweat for a few weeks. Then again, this is your story and who knows...there are some pretty forgiving people out there. Anyway, I like this story enough to get all into it with the wanting Sess to suffer just a little bit. Good job!