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OMFG he has taken her as his mate wow thats all i can say and UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

That was great!! Update PLEEZ!

omg this is graet i love it
plz up date soon i cant wait wut happins next
plz update i hope there will be a lemon
great story too

wow this is great i like it i wonder wut happins next
hope you update soon i will be waiting

YES! you so have to contuie with this story!!! It is awsome!!! I love the plot and i belive you've hit the deamon Inuyasha on the head!!!!

Interesting story. UPdate soon. Can't wait to read Inuyasha's reaction to what his demon side did.

i don't think the above reviews were 'flames' persay but rather fusturated inuyasha fans. The plot isn't that original and does rehash some of the more negative perceptions of the rosary. The story was fine. However, your style and punctuation needs to be fixed a bit. You have a couple of misspellings (check "poring" in the first paragraph. I believe it should be "pouring") and the unfortunate tendency to have run on sentences. It may be just the format you used to upload the document with but little things like that- bad spelling, grammatical errors and some trite lines ("oh no, i'm too late")- detract from the overall feel of the fic. While it is a good fic and will perhaps become more original as the plot develops, those mistakes are ruining it a bit.
This isn't a flame. I'm just trying to point out some avenues for improvement.

This is really good!

what no more?

It is fan fiction, so you be all means have every right to write however you see fit. But it would be nice to have certain things taken into context.