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May 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
God. I cannot help it. Your story is awful...as are your others.
YOUR spelling errors that crack me up:
STORY as in ONE story...is not spelled "Storie"
NARAKU is spelled NARAKU not Neroku or however the fuck you spelled it.
JEWEL which is one of the easiest damn things to spell (Considering 90% of all stories have the word "Jewel" in it.)
By the way. Your "storie" isn't really a story. Its more like....two paragraphs, with really SUPER bad punctuation and grammar...and spelling, that are SO atrocious I can't help but leave a bad critique review. You seriously should delete all your stories, rewrite them, beta them, spell check them, grammar check them, and THEN re-post them. Yes, your stories are THAT horrible.
YOUR spelling errors that crack me up:
STORY as in ONE story...is not spelled "Storie"
NARAKU is spelled NARAKU not Neroku or however the fuck you spelled it.
JEWEL which is one of the easiest damn things to spell (Considering 90% of all stories have the word "Jewel" in it.)
By the way. Your "storie" isn't really a story. Its more like....two paragraphs, with really SUPER bad punctuation and grammar...and spelling, that are SO atrocious I can't help but leave a bad critique review. You seriously should delete all your stories, rewrite them, beta them, spell check them, grammar check them, and THEN re-post them. Yes, your stories are THAT horrible.
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March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I don't want you to be angry with me but... I read two of your story and it's always the same... there is too much of "and". Now I don't say that your storie is shit because I did like it. But try to cut the "and" a little. And do not forget to tell how is talking. Anyway, can't wait to read more.
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September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
O.O is all i will say plz update
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September 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it was angsty.if i was kags i would cut that ho'
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August 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love it!!!
But you might want to do something like this : "Where did she go?"
and not : Where did she go?
((just an example))
But you might want to do something like this : "Where did she go?"
and not : Where did she go?
((just an example))
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August 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You have absolutely no idea what you're doing, do you?
Did you even revise the story before posting it?
Well, here is some advice
A: put quotations on the text when someone is speaking.
B: tell the reader her was speaking after they start talking
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So your telling me this is her jewal shard the only way to get here.(Then she must have saw me and Kikyou and then she must have heard what I said to Kikyo.Oh no what have I done to you Kagome.)Im going after her and bringing her back I promise you all that.So Inuyasha your going to make a promise the sameone one you all most made to Kagome.Wow Inuyasha you really care about her that much that you said that not knowing she was there how does that not surprise me.
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Who was speaking just then?
Inuyasha? Sango? Miroku?
Well, I suggest you use proper punctuation when writing a story. And please revise it before posting, there were a lot of spelling errors.
But otherwise, you're story is quite interesting and I hope to see more of it. <333
[I'm not flaming, just pointing out some facts that I think you should be informed of.]
Did you even revise the story before posting it?
Well, here is some advice
A: put quotations on the text when someone is speaking.
B: tell the reader her was speaking after they start talking
[/quote]
So your telling me this is her jewal shard the only way to get here.(Then she must have saw me and Kikyou and then she must have heard what I said to Kikyo.Oh no what have I done to you Kagome.)Im going after her and bringing her back I promise you all that.So Inuyasha your going to make a promise the sameone one you all most made to Kagome.Wow Inuyasha you really care about her that much that you said that not knowing she was there how does that not surprise me.
[/quote]
Who was speaking just then?
Inuyasha? Sango? Miroku?
Well, I suggest you use proper punctuation when writing a story. And please revise it before posting, there were a lot of spelling errors.
But otherwise, you're story is quite interesting and I hope to see more of it. <333
[I'm not flaming, just pointing out some facts that I think you should be informed of.]
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August 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great storie